Sorry I make you lush

What's wang-eyed ?

Whatever it is it sounds good!
The cyst simile may well put me off rasperries for life. I suppose it could have been worse - blackberry verruccas. anything to do with diseased flesh or skin, especially in the foot area makes me feel ill.

Great poem though and here is a link

http://www.abctales.com/story/spack/sorry-i-make-you-lush

Thanks for the link, Jude, I knew I'd forgotten something...

Wang-eye is when you're all bloodshot from too much spliff, je pense. Did enjoy many of the weirdly collocated images in this poem - reckon it's worth a bit of a reshuffle for coherence. And I agree avec Lib - title could work harder.

Thanks for the flag. The title's from a great song by Luke Vibert. The song's great; the title's not.

This might be worth a reshuffle at some point; I reckon there are a few lines worth keeping.

Cheers,

Joe

This is brilliant, as ever. So stuffed full of originality and quirky imagery.
One thing - do I not know what loofers are, or do you mean loofahs?
The title to me looks as though you meant to type 'sorry I made you blush', but then I dont know the song.

Top stuff.

Oops, you're right, thanks Pizza. It's supposed to be Loofahs. I've always thought that loofah is a really weird looking word.

Cheers,

Joe

i agree this is full of original imagery and i particularly liked the ''fuck-off mirror'' - that's how i feel when i look in a mirror, but what does it all mean? Is it about a hangover? why loofahs and holograms.

its lack of coherence keeps me at a distance, am i missing the meaning?

Juliet