we are one angry socity
we are all blinded by rage
we try to keep ourselve to ourselves
we bottle things up
we never tell what we think is our own
we lie to escape the truth
murder, mistrust, brutalitly
all to save ourselves
we are a bitter world
plauged by anger and greed
and we're so stressed and annoyed
we have so many pharses for it
pissed off, fucked off, annoyed
we live our lives in the hope
of bettering ourselves for death
take roadkill for an example
been hit my mechaines of our,
greed for power and advance
but we never give them a proper send off
or even give them a second glance
and love we're hopeless at love
we say you can't find the one you love
till your old and mature
well what the hell does maturaty
have to do with love at all?
we lie to protect the truth
but what if the truth
is better than a lie
and when the truth is out
"we're all just fucked"
Comments
Miss_D_Meaner | September 26, 2009 - 11:18
An interesting poem. Full of strong emotion. A good read. I like the last two lines too.
Cavalcaderl | October 7, 2009 - 21:52
new julie
yes I agree with Miss_D _Meaner
well done you managed put on paper
how your thought and feel.Unfortunately
world to-day.
verse I like;
And love wer'e hopeless at love
we say you can't find the one till
your old (cheeky) and mature.
Well what the hell does maturity
have to do with love at all.
quite right, must have compatibility
like and do and say thing.
might want read my "What Is Love"
it's like a ladder each step up together
not always so once get know each other
whatever age, times careers sports situations change
people, greed money,material things.
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sabzwin | October 14, 2009 - 17:13
In my opinion, there is no right or wrong form of writing. (Apart from the aspect considering grammar I suppose) this is a harmless but strong opinion about love. No one entirely understands love, so nobody can be wrong about it. It's true, some people never grow up, or learn from there mistakes, at least in this case, aitticboy can reflect on your views and use that to improve his work and expand his ideas for his future work.