I walk through the
Door to the kitchen.
Day light splashing the
Ornate tiling.
As I fetch you a drink.
No task too menial for
You. I stop up
Talking to you, about
Hardships of the day,
Irritations and
Nagging problems you
Got to deal with that you shouldn't need to.
I'll be your
Doctor,
Diagnose your problems and
Offer you medicine,
As you lay there
Nicely tuck into bed because
You're ill, I’ll be
There to comfort you,
Hold you in my arms, whisper
I love you in your ear.
Never will I
Get annoyed with you.
I'll sing you a song in the
Day time, because you love it when I
Do, my voice never
Over-powering to you.
Also I'll take you out in the
Night, romantic meals
Your favorite restaurant.
Take you on long, moon lit walks,
Holding your hand an
Indescribable sensation delights all my
Nerves, this amazing feeling I
Get because of you
Simply put, I'd do anything.
Comments
Highhat | June 3, 2011 - 14:03
What a lovely poem about devotion ;))
andrew-evans | June 3, 2011 - 15:08
Thank you very highhat, i'm glad you enjoyed it
insertponceyfre... | June 3, 2011 - 21:05
lovely andrew! And a perfect ending. Loads of typos though, and I hope you go back through and fix them because this poem is worth it.
andrew-evans | June 3, 2011 - 21:17
Hopefully have corrected all typo's
Highhat | June 5, 2011 - 07:45
I hope you don't mind but I will draw your attention to the typos you haven't corrected
too menial 1st stanza
have to deal with 1st stanza
I'll be your
doctor 2nd stanza
Your favorite restaurant 3rd stanza
holding your hand 3rd stanza
just a couple of tweaks
andrew-evans | June 5, 2011 - 16:33
thats my bad, should never trust ms word for grammer
Highhat | June 6, 2011 - 06:36
Hi Just thought I would come back as I think this is very promising .
You see your spell-check in Word won't correct grammatical mistakes only if they are spelling mistakes. The mistakes you make are very ordinary so don't be too worried.
You just have to watch out for you and your and you're (you are)
favourite i with a U and grammar is with an A
By the way did you mean "acrostic"? I couldn't find "acroustic" in the dictionary.
but really do keep writing and it will straighten out with time.
I have learnt a lot on abctales and it is always good to get a few tips I think. I hope you keep enjoying writing as you have the knack of it.
have fun
ATB
;)Pia
andrew-evans | June 6, 2011 - 09:33
Hey. I love writing and i don't want to stop. I know my spelling and grammer are really bad at times, and i know it frustrates alot of readers, which is why 'm always glad when people point them out. I do try to correct as i'm writing, but i write really quickly and thus spelling and grammer sometimes get lost in the flow. Thank you for you kind comments Pia.
andrew-evans | June 6, 2011 - 09:33
Hey. I love writing and i don't want to stop. I know my spelling and grammer are really bad at times, and i know it frustrates alot of readers, which is why 'm always glad when people point them out. I do try to correct as i'm writing, but i write really quickly and thus spelling and grammer sometimes get lost in the flow. Thank you for you kind comments Pia.