I'd been thinking about the passage of time,
and how (watching the clock
prowl around the hours) an hour
could be a year, while a year
could seem an hour,
and so
I was glad to see him.
Death hadn’t knocked;
he just set down opposite me,
arranging his robes about him, and
lit a cigarette, like he owned the place,
which, in a way, he did.
‘I’ve been thinking about you,’ he said;
‘you know I come to everyone,
but I don’t like to come to those
who haven’t lived.’
His skin had a yellow tinge,
a moistened papyrus look.
‘Why don’t you get out of here?
Soon. Why don’t you go somewhere?’ he asked me,
looking intent on something,
on something in his own mind.
‘I could walk along the Ridgeway,’ I said.
His head tilted and he looked along his nose -
a long nose, a nose like half a suspension bridge.
‘No, you need to fly. Go to the pyramids.
Or, Pompeii. I often go there;
hop on the wing of an Alitalia jet
and, at the right moment, slip off
and glide to the empty, night-lit Forum.
I kind of like the place.’
‘Like me,’ he reflected,
flicking his ash on the carpet,
‘you can think how well-preserved,
thanks to that little incident and, like me,
you can people it with its old life again,
in your mind, in your mind’s eye ...’
‘I’m not sure,’ I said.
And then
like a shooting star across the sky,
a thought of what the hell;
and I put my arm round Death
and we departed, soon to part – each to
our separate path,
our individual way.
Comments
Doeslittle | May 18, 2008 - 19:57
Liked the idea of a clock prowling round the hours, loved the second to last stanza.
HaiAnh | May 18, 2008 - 23:09
Death seems quite camp here, but also slightly cynical and certainly very British. He reminds me of Alan Rickman.
You have a keen eye for detail which is important in convinicing the reader that a fictional event is believable. Their were also some great lines and ideas, however the were a few cliched phrases which detracted from the originality of the poem.
animan | May 19, 2008 - 14:01
Really helpful comments - many thanks to you both. I laughed about Alan Rickman and the cliches. You're right of course. I think it's too late to do anything much about that here, but I'm gonna keep it in the front of my mind in whatever I work on from here. I was trying to avoid cliches in that last sentence with mixed success!!