Loss (IP)

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A loss is a gain

To lose is to gain

In loss is gain

You lose the day

and out come the stars

shimmering like strings of the night

romantic night

You lose the night

and inching forward

is the sun

great rays of Atun

ultraviolet irradiating your skin

When the snake sheds its skin

that lies there wretched gone, going

like a snail up a fence

and the snake

breathes in bigger

and imagines its next meal

bigger, much bigger

and out come the stars of the night

perplexed and waiting

saying a loss is a gain

and you do not,

do not

do not

believe them

knowing they’ve lied before

and wait for the day

to burn

into the veins of your skin

broken, carping

and to feel them sting there

vinegar and
acid rain

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Kahdai | July 13, 2010 - 14:54

I really like this animan, rythem to it & I like the stars of the night

perplexed and waiting

saying a loss is a gain

and you do not,

do not

do not

believe them

knowing they’ve lied before

and wait for the day

to burn

into the veins of your skin

I really like this part, it seems to me, to be of great emotion of loss. Kahdai

animan | July 13, 2010 - 19:36

LOL - it was only about the loss of innocence really and about how, when you think you have something, you have nothing and how, when you think you have nothing, you have something - kind of putting loss on its (proverbial) head - but thanks for your kind thoughts. Animan x

Kahdai | July 13, 2010 - 19:39

Well I am glad, it is very good anyway & that it can be interpreted different ways :) Kahdai x