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Posted by Aronowitz on December 10, 2009 - 16:34

Something dead is going on
the carrion crows have been and gone
the bright white snows sing a song
of scarlet.

Something dead is going on
the pristine snows have wiped out wrong
the big black crows still sing their song
of murder.

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SundaysChild | December 11, 2009 - 03:58

Interesting.
I really liked the first part and I think it flows better somehow than the second part.
Perhaps it is the 'big black crows' bit- just seems slightly clumsy in comparison with the rest of the piece. Or it could be that it's nearly 4am and I can't read things properly at the moment.

Very much enjoyed.

shoe | December 11, 2009 - 11:08

I really enjoyed this too, original and haunting.