Benighted marriage

Your poems are wonderful ;)Thanks for the enrichment.

wow, Highhat. Thank you for such a lovely compliment! I'm very happy you enjoyed my poems, thats all the poet can ask for, and more.

Beeme xx

don't mention it ;D

;D

Hello Beeme! I really love this one - as you know, I've always been a sucker for your love poetry! The lines about the graffiti did jar with me a bit and I wonder if you would consider:

'You left my
body, an empty
casket. A cold
and fragile
canvas, covered
in your false
graffiti.'

or

'You left my
body, an empty
casket. A cold
and fragile
canvas, covered
in your graffiti;
your lies.

But this is a really great poem and I love the short-line structure too ;)

Magic xxx

Thank you Magic. I like your re-edit ideas, the second one worked for me, thank you for the advise and taking the time :) . I'm really glad you enjoyed ;)

Beeme xx

another great poem; well done!
;)

Thank you very much darkenwolf!

Beeme xx

As always, glad I could be of help, Beeme ;)

Magic xxx

:D

Beeme xx

Great poem, enjoyed this one a lot. You're imagery is really good.

David xx

Thank you very much David, I'm glad you enjoyed this one a lot ;)

Beeme xx

new Beeme
Hi! I enjoyed this
very emotionally sad, but
you explained it well.
And I have learn't this
morning, a new word Benighted
to live in darkness, or over
shadowed. Good poem
Lost previous comment to you
touched submit, lightly didn't
go through.
julie xx

Hi Julie, I'm very happy you enjoyed. 'Benighted' is my new favourite word, its a great word isn't it? ;) Thank you for your lovely comments :)

Beeme xx

I like "agonising commitment" - been there and know what you mean!

Thanks Steve, glad you could relate ;)

What have I got in my pocket?

I bet you have Beeme's ring?

? :D aha