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Posted by Beeme on February 14, 2011 - 20:40

The skyline
is torn into strips
blue-orange-grey.
Throwing light
upon trees
-skeletal and charcoal black
elated against the horizon.
Demi-Gods congregating outside
with the luminous moon
golden moccasin white
casting her acidic glow.
I stir in the last streams
of black-blue light of dusk
my image melting in the shadows.

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Comments

fatboy74 | February 14, 2011 - 21:30

Hi Beeme, Have you just changed the ending? Love that golden moccasin white. Well done. :-)

Beeme | February 14, 2011 - 22:02

Yup just now Fatboy. I think thats my favourite image too :-] I'm really happy you enjoyed and I appreciate you taking the time to read my work and comment. It means a lot.

Beeme xx

Highhat | February 14, 2011 - 22:28

Very vividly described Beeme- liked the last 2 lines especially
;)Pia

Beeme | February 14, 2011 - 22:31

Thank you so much Pia, glad you enjoyed :] xx

seashore | February 15, 2011 - 10:10

Agree with Pia, Beeme - particularly about the ending. xx

Silver Spun Sand | February 15, 2011 - 13:48

This is so very beautiful, Beeme;) Well done.

Tina xx

Beeme | February 15, 2011 - 13:49

Thank you Seashore, glad you liked the ending, I worked hard on it :]

Beeme xx

Beeme | February 15, 2011 - 13:52

Thank you so very much Tina, for your lovely comment. Your substained encouragement means a lot to me.

Beeme xx