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Posted by Beeme on December 6, 2009 - 20:49

I'm left looking for a place that I am told only exists in stories told to children..
Looking for a day when a footprint will define more than a sense of being and become a signal of things to come, so we can say we know which way we are going because this person walked there to.
And that even though the universe keeps expanding and time keeps unravelling.
Some moments will always exist in their own right.
And that that is not the weight of gravity pulling us down, but the power of belief in things that are yet to be proven and we can wait till then..
I want to tell you that philosophy has a place in society and that science will not try to define everything that life throws our way, but I can't.
The same way that someone must have promised God that the world would never question him,
but yet here we are.
The same way that are lips were left within inches of touching and that that hurts more than any atheist can ever try to bruise God, that he is just another subject that is untouchable.
That perhaps one day it can exist.
I am looking for a time when sound travels further and does more than inform the next ear
and that somebody will stop and really hear.
Take the time to listen to the old man up the road,
who before now was told he was mad because he says that “time can stand still.”
Because he loves his wife as much now as he did in life and that when she visits him he holds her in his arms and feel her heart beating.. so she is not a ghost, her footprints were too quiet for him to hear but her heart was so beautiful that its fingerprints imprinted on his mind.
That man who has reached a place that we all dream about.
I want to ask you if you would want to spend an eternity with me and I would if I wasn't certain of your answer, preparing myself for another eruption on the fault line of my heart.
Everything exists for a reason, so what happens if your heart stops beating? I'll never get the chance to memorise its rhythm. I'm left looking for a place that I am told only exists in stories told to children,
but what if the impossible could really happen.
Who can say what possible and impossible anyway..
Would you greet me with hello,
if you knew that time was passing quicker than the beating of your heart and that we were fighting to qualify in something that was beyond anybodies comprehension,
that there is no definition or explanation of why my mouth runs dry when I am next to you,
even though science tells me that liquid should exist their.. but for that moment it doesn't.
I'm left looking for a place I am told only exists in stories told to children,
But it only takes one man to leave a footprint for another to follow, throwing our dreams into a lottery of existence.

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Comments

Lennie | December 6, 2009 - 21:12

Well done Beeme, I really love this poem, one of your best yet ma dear I can really feel the much emotion in this poem and the strength of the emotion is so great it makes the poem well worth Reading, again really love this poem can't wait to read your next.

Love
Lennie x

Beeme | December 6, 2009 - 21:15

Thankyou Lennie I am so pleased you enjoyed my poem so much ;) xx

Silver Spun Sand | December 6, 2009 - 21:31

Beeme - the sentiment behind this is beautiful and obviously, heartfelt. But always remember, childhood is a place, not a time.

Tina xx

Nathan Bednarek | December 6, 2009 - 21:33

Beautiful, amazing, wise and inspiring. Definitely one of your best. My favourite lines:

'I want to tell you that philosophy has a place in society and that science will not try to define everything that life throws our way, but I can't.
The same way that someone must have promised God that the world would never question him,'

(this made me stop and think and that is not an easy thing to achieve as a writer- to make others consider his/her point of view).

and

'Everything exists for a reason, so what happens when your heart stops beating,
and I never got the chance to memorise its rhythm.' – but shouldn’t there be a question mark at the end?

Genius, genius, genius!

I am extremely impressed, Beeeme, and I can almost literally imagine you performing this, even though I don't know what you sound/look like ;-p

One little suggestion, but feel free to ignore it.

I think this 'But it only takes one man to leave a footprint for another in order for him to find his way,' would sound better like this 'But it only takes one man to leave a footprint for another to follow,' because it sounds more concise.

Again, an excellent piece and one to be proud of. Hats off to you Ms Beeme ;-)

Nathan xox

Beeme | December 6, 2009 - 21:40

Thankyou Tina, I'm glad you enjoyed. This is a first attempt at performance poetry so I wasn't sure what reception it would get, your kind words made me happy that I posted it :) Childhood isn't meant to be the time, the whole idea is meant to be chidlike.. x

Beeme xx

Beeme | December 6, 2009 - 21:49

Wow thankyou so much Nathan for such a wonderful comment, I am so glad that you enjoyed my poem and that you could imagine me performing it as it means it works! x 'genius' can't thankyou enough for your kind words really made my night ;) I have added a question mark and changed the end line, it really works better now. Thankyou again.

Love Beeme xox

PascalJBarry | January 6, 2010 - 21:12

Hi there, I've been flicking through your poems and I stopped at this one. I don't write poetry so it's hard for me to judge technically, but...

"I'm left looking for a place that I am told only exists in stories told to children"

"someone must have promised God that the world would never question him"

... are killer lines. The real protein of the poem. I would have liked...

"so what happens when your heart stops beating, and I never got the chance to memorise its rhythm?"

... to read...

"so what happens if your heart stops beating? I'll never get the chance to memorise its rhythm."

Look out for a book called The Unbearable Lightness of Being by Milan Kundera, if you haven't already read it. I think you'd like it.

Beeme | January 6, 2010 - 22:07

Hi Paul, I like the way you phrase that and I'm glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the suggestion, I looked at 'The Unbearable Lightness Of Being' and want to get a copy myself.

Beeme xx