He said

He said stop writing and talk to me,
I said nothing because the scratching of pen onto paper;
Is silent to my ears like a memory
nd I didn’t know I had woken him.
He said lying in the darkness,
trying to part the air with his breath-
that I should take a break.
But there wasn’t time to gauge his reaction,
I turned his fleshy outline into a notebook.
I re-wrote the dimensions of our relationship
before he woke, laced up his tie like a second chance.
I said I don’t want to bore you
but what I really meant was-
you’ve seen me carry these poems
like bill boards across my body for so long.
You cannot separate me
from the papery surface of my bones.
He said I needed more sleep,
I replied with a quote by Shane Koyczan.
The slam poem I recited at 2am in the morning
his words were as good as a lullaby.
Like trying to hoax a one year into sleep
when they’ve just experienced living.
I said I’ve always known that ink is my blood stream
and I spent many nights between rows of words,
like the arms of a lover trying to calm night mares,
before I ever met you.

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Comments

skinner_jennifer | October 28, 2011 - 16:51

Hi Beeme,

this is a very clever poem, of which I can relate
to. poetry is such a complex subject, but you manage
so well to be descriptive and yet lead the reader
into your world through words.

I enjoyed this one very much.

Thankyou for sharing.

Jenny.

Highhat | October 28, 2011 - 18:20

Needs a tad editing Beeme..
2nd line- you don't need that semi-colon
"but what I really meant was :
you've seen me carry these poems
I think the second last line needs a make over- you have used the words "lace" twice in the poem- I'm sure you could find another one to fit in here- doesn't really work.
I think you overuse your semi-colons- you could replace them with hyphens or commas or even colons!
otherwise a very good poem - nice and honest and relevant to your work as a poet.

;)Pia

Beeme | October 28, 2011 - 19:03

Thanks very much Jenny and Pia, I've edited this abit.

Beeme xx

Blessing | October 30, 2011 - 12:28

Agree with all the above. Just needs tidying up Beeme as the essence and ingredients are all there.

Beeme | October 30, 2011 - 12:53

Thanks Blessing, I'll see what I can do :)

beeme xx