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Lips must part..

Posted by Beeme on July 8, 2009 - 13:34

Quietly our lips must part,
and our hands unfold.
We cannot rot in this paradise
made for us and lovers alike.
Time won't keep as many eyes
will weep ,as lovers grow apart.
Flowers won't always blossom
and the sun can't always shine.
The only way our love can survive
the test of time is through our
many memories.

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Comments

artisus | July 8, 2009 - 13:43

this is good!

Beeme | July 8, 2009 - 13:48

Thankyou artisus, glad you think so :)

SundaysChild | July 8, 2009 - 13:59

Very good.

Beeme | July 8, 2009 - 14:02

Thankyou Sunday's child!

MistakenMagic | July 8, 2009 - 14:37

'Quietly our lips must part,
and our hands unfold.'

- wow, just breath-taking! Well done on this one ;)

Magic xxx

Beeme | July 8, 2009 - 14:50

Thankyou Magic, I wrote this quickly and I have had a lot of nice feedback, which I wasn't expecting lol

Thanks again Beeme xx

Jupiter | July 8, 2009 - 15:56

Hey Beeme - stepping up a gear eh? Lulled me into a false sense of security before but bringing the big guns out now ;-).lol Nice one :-)

Beeme | July 8, 2009 - 16:05

Ha.... Well if I did then it certainly wasn't intentional, of course ;-)

Glad you liked this one :)

Beeme | July 9, 2009 - 09:11

Thanks Cavalcaderl for the kind comment although this piece was by Beeme and not Mistaken Magic xxx

Cavalcaderl | July 13, 2009 - 08:53

new Beeme my opologies sorry done in quickness for putting wrong name, sometimes I have to work out.
I need new glasses! no only kidding.Must concentrate
better.But so much to do here
julie xx Cavalcaderl good luck work.

Cavalcaderl | July 13, 2009 - 09:00

new Beeme great piece quite explosive very true to life! but flowers some more beautiful varieties and colours. good luck exams
corrected now. sorry
edit button wouldn't so you have
2 opologies."Lips apart" fantastic
way all dialogued is that the word
to-gether. julie x cavalcaderl