Reflections

Hi there, Beeme. This is another good one.

Actually, the final line where you say, 'and I' should in fact be 'and me'. I.e. that is to say, perfect reflections of you and perfection reflections of me...One of those times it is correct to say 'you and me' and incorrect to say 'you and I'.

So as to the final stanza, maybe:-

'I am lost in the movie of your eyelids,
screening perfect reflections of you
and perceptions of me'.

Something for you to think about anyway. It is just a suggestion. You're the poet after all;-)

Tina xx

Thankyou Tina, I really like your idea for the final stanza, I have added some other stanza's.

Beeme xx

This works very well now, Beeme.

I particularly like this stanza:-)

'You have many secrets and your words,
they're anagrams compelling my constant
attention.'

And whilst we are on the subject of anagrams, this weekend's Telegraph prize crossword was a nightmare
;-) Far removed from your lovely poem.

Tina xx

There's some great images in this one Beeme - especially love the x ray image! ;)

Magic xxx

There's some great images in this one Beeme - especially love the x ray image! ;)

Magic xxx

Ooops my laptop seems to have had a fit and posted my comment again!

Really like every stanza and it finishes perfectly,
:-)

Thankyou Tina, Magic and Shoe, glad you enjoyed.

Beeme xx

Sorry about the double post!

I absolutely LOVE the last stanza. A very sweet poem, but not lacking any depth. Enjoyed. Well done.

Nathan.

new Beeme
This is brilliant writer
you are, and can put your emotion's
and feeling's in.When I was 19 whoop's
long time I made someone in forces a jumper?
but I was told parting gift's.didn't know or believe.
I do hope your feel bit brighter, marriages
not cracked up to be everything, like a swing!
I could tare my hair out sometimes, saying.To be accepted in all, and do and say.Your young and life before you, believe me be strong,like your wonderful poem's. sorry not quite right word's so taken out
Love julie x

Thankyou so much nathan and Julie.

Beeme xx