I've made these
boats
-sweat and blood
built some large
some small
some that don't
balance right-
capsize in water
watercolour wounds
spill out,
I've used my hands;
moulded the
white-ashes
of once proud trees,
studied a course
on origami,
I've tested the
water, my feet
trying to float
in tornado
waves
to make way for
you.
Comments
SundaysChild | January 31, 2011 - 19:47
Intriguing piece Beeme, much enjoyed. xx
pinda | January 31, 2011 - 20:42
This piece truly expressed the lengths some people go for their loved ones.
Beautifully written.
:)
X
Pinda
seashore | January 31, 2011 - 21:15
Especially like the last two stanzas and last line, Beeme. Unusual theme - like it. x
Beeme | January 31, 2011 - 22:15
Thank you SundayssChild, glad you found this interesting :]
Hello Pinda, thank you so much. glad you enjoyed :]
Hey Seashore,
Glad you enjoyed and liked this :]
Beeme xx
fatboy74 | February 1, 2011 - 00:12
This is a wonderful piece Beeme, original and contemporary. ATB FB :-)
Beeme | February 1, 2011 - 07:55
Thanks so much Fatboy! Glad you liked :]
Beeme xx
Silver Spun Sand | February 1, 2011 - 10:40
I agree with FB, Beeme. This has a real 'modernistic' feel to it. Well done;-)
Tina xx
Beeme | February 1, 2011 - 11:53
Thank you Tina, I'm very happy you enjoyed :]
Beeme xx