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Posted by Beeme on January 15, 2011 - 13:40

A luminous
organic moon
rises high-
flashes its
mineral glow
a halo of orange
light dissolves
into gold

aglow, a blue
rim forms, like
a frozen pond-
magical for the
moment before
it dissolves,

the incandescent
purple-blue shine,
like the presence
of undesired bruises
tainting skin.

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Comments

seashore | January 15, 2011 - 13:52

Lovely.

Silver Spun Sand | January 15, 2011 - 14:29

Like this one, Beeme. The structure - nice and tight. You paint a magical picture;-)

Tina xx

Yazmin | January 15, 2011 - 14:53

Beautiful :D

Yaz xx

Beeme | January 15, 2011 - 16:04

Thank you Seashore, Tina and Yazmin. I'm very happy you all enjoyed! :)

Beeme xx

Cavalcaderl | January 15, 2011 - 23:41

new Beeme
Nice one very well explained
full of colour and words stand out.
lovely.
Like the presence of undesires
bruises and tainted skin.
julie xx

Beeme | January 15, 2011 - 23:45

Thank you very much Julie. I'm really happy you enjoyed and like all the colour imagery I used. :)

Beeme xx

skinner_jennifer | January 16, 2011 - 03:20

Hi Beeme,

you have really described the moon so beautifully
in this poem. I love the colours, as Tina said so
magical.

Thanks for the read.

Jenny.

insertponceyfre... | January 16, 2011 - 14:38

this is beautiful beeme - I especially like the last stanza

Beeme | January 16, 2011 - 15:32

Thank you so much Jenny, I'm very happy you enjoyed this so much :) Your kind comment means a lot.

Thank you Insert, I'm pleased you enjoyed this one too!

Thank you for the cherry, a lovely surprise on a dull Sunday of English revision ;-)

Beeme xx

Silver Spun Sand | January 16, 2011 - 15:39

Well done with knobs on...for the cherry, Beeme;-)

Tina xx

Beeme | January 16, 2011 - 16:22

Thank you Tina :D

Beeme xx

fatboy74 | January 17, 2011 - 11:01

Pretty wonder4ful stuff and the last stanza with the bruise image is a blinder - really well done. :-)

Beeme | January 17, 2011 - 12:24

wow, thanks so much fatboy! Much appreciated :)

Beeme xx

Kahdai | January 26, 2011 - 21:36

Magical, very your style that I like K x

Beeme | January 26, 2011 - 21:54

Thnak you so much Kahdai! Glad you enjoyed this one :)

Beeme xx