Primeval

In another world I didn't know the words I said.
Which shattered any chance at reconciliation.
I never feared emotions,
I found comfort winning a battle.
I never got angry.

I stood young and dumb
on the same ground a primeval once stood.
As he gasped at a gigantic plant
felt his way back home through a sand storm,
hunted dinosaur- walked fearless.

In a time before anything had a soul,
I couldn't feel.
As he never knew why he kissed the girl
he has children with.
We never grew away from each other
because moving wasn't an option
in a world where giant lizards patrolled
the land searching for meat.

He never heard
the half-intimate calls from his mother
in-between the grunting and screeching
that was speech.
Life was just a cycle,
not enough time to reminisce,
living fast- hand to mouth.

Standing here,
on the same ground the primeval stood.
I can only hum and motion the vowels
I've lost the ability to combine into words,
and point at the gigantic insects as they pass-
warning you.

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Comments

skinner_jennifer | October 29, 2010 - 22:45

Hi Beeme,
a very intuitive piece, full of thoughts of another
time. I really like this piece, it seems you have
given it much thought. Thanks for the read.
Jenny.

Beeme | October 30, 2010 - 08:52

Thank you Jenny, I'm really happy you enjoyed :)

Beeme xx

Nolan | October 31, 2010 - 15:47

Structure is always a good thing, and really it’s an entertaining
little story! What lively imagination!

Nolan &&

MistakenMagic | November 1, 2010 - 13:06

'In a time before anything had a soul'

- just love that image, Beeme! An enthralling read - well done ;)

Magic xxx

Kahdai | November 3, 2010 - 21:02

Ooh this is fantastic timetravel thankyou Beeme! x

rjnewlyn | November 3, 2010 - 22:18

I liked this - it's sometimes good to know that the ground has seen earlier days. Is 'primeval' a noun (not that it matters particularly)? And is the second 'the' in the next-to-last line meant to be 'they'?

Rob

Beeme | November 7, 2010 - 16:53

Thanks very much Nolan!

Beeme xx

Beeme | November 7, 2010 - 16:53

Thanks Magic, glad you enjoyed :)

Beeme xx

Beeme | November 7, 2010 - 16:54

no thank you Kahdai for your lovely comment ! x

Beeme | November 7, 2010 - 16:55

Yeah, thank you for spotting the typos, I'll change them now :) I'm glad you enjoyed.

Beeme xx