You traveled the world, discovered a lot. You'd pinpoint countries on the map of the world that you wanted to visit and when you were in agreement book the tickets, it was exhilarating; a great life.
Since death closed his eyes you struggle to open yours, blinking only to remember the happier times. He visits sometimes to check on you and you feel his warmth when he smiles. When he turns to leave the grease across his cheek shines, brandished and real. Long hours at work- early joint pain but still that smile, forever an adventure; your motto.
Blink, the scorching heat of the African sun how you remembers the sun rise to greet him, when you traveled in the air balloon. Today the skies are mostly overcast but sometimes the sun finds enough time to shine and you remember, how he'd be made up, he'd say; a sign of good things to come.
So everyday you tried, so hard to shine, until one day the sparkling star of your life faded and your eyes didn't want to venture on, slowly the shadows began to engulf their vision.
Blink again, your visions a little hazy but remembering him is how you stay awake. Lay your head down and rest, memories never fade and dreaming will always continue. It's not all ashes and dust its moments that will always exist in your heart.
Comments
insertponceyfre... | January 8, 2011 - 13:10
beeme this is great. i really love the idea of the blinks, and the different memories across the years. In the second paragraph I find it a bit confusing - you seem to be talking about several different people - your great nan - and ... you perhaps? (not sure) - "you visit sometimes to check on her". That part's hard to understand - perhaps you could try to find a way of making it clearer - maybe use I - if it is you. I just read that back and it sounds like nonsense - I hope you can understand what I mean - it's because you use "you" to refer to your great nan all the ay through, so when you use it for someone else it confuses me.
Apart from that I really really like it!
Beeme | January 8, 2011 - 14:57
Thank you very much Insert! I completely agree about the second paragraph, hope it makes a lot more sense now. I'm really happy you enjoyed :)
Beeme xx
MistakenMagic | January 8, 2011 - 19:40
'Since death closed his eyes you struggle to open yours, blinking only to remember the happier times.' - this is so beautifully phrased, Beeme. A very moving tribute. Well done ;)
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | January 8, 2011 - 19:48
This is truly beautiful, Beeme;-)
Tina xx
Beeme | January 8, 2011 - 20:12
Thank you so very much Tina and Magic, I'm very happy you enjoyed.
Beeme xx
seashore | January 9, 2011 - 09:58
This is beautifully told and very moving.
Beeme | January 9, 2011 - 10:33
Thank you very much Seashore!
Beeme xx
Silver Spun Sand | January 9, 2011 - 11:16
Just noticed your well-earned cherry for this one, Beeme. More than well done;-)
Tina xx
Beeme | January 9, 2011 - 11:17
Thank you so much Tina! :)
Beeme xx
Cavalcaderl | January 9, 2011 - 15:37
new Beeme
Yes,well deserved cherry!
Well thought up. Like it all,
and the last line
It's not all ashes and dust
it's the moments that exist in your heart
How are you.
Nice day to-day.
julie xx
Kahdai | January 14, 2011 - 20:03
Adore it so much the ending especially K xx
Beeme | January 14, 2011 - 20:05
Thanks Julie, really happy you enjoyed! I'm good thank you, how are you?
Beeme xx
Beeme | January 14, 2011 - 20:07
Thank you so much Kahdai!
Beeme xx