Saved my life

A stranger saved my life,
reversed my crash landing exit

an inch of string winding from you
stretching far enough to reach me,

everybody thought that the connection
was a premature idea born in my head.

I twisted my arms out towards you
you tied the string around my purple wrists

and moved slowly proving something,
that I was worth the wait

connected with something other than words.
You lifting my dusty arms to a slow rescue

proved another thing, that I was precious,
“Your body is heavy, with the weight of gold”

you told me, even your lips moved slowly
I tried to trace their outline with my fingertips,

before I fell back out of continuousness, I tried to speak,
but you ran your fingertips over my mouth.

Whispering “Sleep is like gold ,also, follow it
into the dark mines of its first breath."

I wanted to, but I was scared, that I would
never wake up. Scared,that that was my fault.

"Don't worry, everything will be fine."
You placed your fingertips over my hand,

you promised me using your words, so that I
would feel safe,then from the corner of my

eyes I watched you remove the string from my arm,
and I was so relieved to be bound to you.

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Comments

Silver Spun Sand | December 8, 2009 - 22:55

A very 'strong' poem, Beeme;-) Well done.

You might consider changing 'relived' to relieved' in its last, more than inspiring, line. And also, changing 'breathe' to 'breath' in the tenth stanza.

'Sleep is like gold, also, follow it
into the dark mines of its first breath.'

Brilliant!

Enjoyed,

Tina x

MistakenMagic | December 9, 2009 - 09:27

I also love the lines that Tina quoted - quite a philosopher aren't you Beeme? ;) I really love the extended metaphor of the bindings - it all works so well!

Magic xxx

shoe | December 9, 2009 - 10:30

Beautifully woven together, much enjoyed, :-)

Beeme | December 9, 2009 - 21:35

Thanks Tina, Changed 'breathe' to 'breath' and 'relived' to 'relieved', I'm glad you enjoyed :)

Beeme xx

Beeme | December 9, 2009 - 21:36

Hehe, I suppose so Magic. Thankyou for your comment, I'm so glad you enjoyed :) How did Oxford go? x

Beeme xx

Beeme | December 9, 2009 - 21:37

Thankyou Shoe, I'm happy you enjoyed :)

Beeme xx