BENEATH THE WEEPING WILLOW TREE


from the ABC set ROMANTICALLY INCLINED TALES - FORBIDDEN LOVE

Like the star-crossed lovers,
Romeo and Juliet,
They come from feuding kin
And must hide their love
They meet in secret
Beside the quiet lake
The only sounds,
Are of the faintest breeze
Disturbing the lofty tree tops
And ducks squabbling on the lake
But despite the quiet
Fearful of discovery
They embrace hidden from view
Beneath a weeping willow tree
Whose leafy pendulous branches
Trail down into the still water
Stirred by the gentle breeze
They dip in an out of the water
Like the toes of a reluctant bather
They kiss there in the quiet shade
And feel at once renewed
No words are spoken
Their language is of caress and kiss
Such tender converse
With limitless vocabulary
And languid pronunciation
Every syllable well employed
And when the final paragraph is reached
They end with perfect punctuation
Stirring from their lovers languor
They tread separate paths
To rejoin warring tribes
Adopting adversarial manner
No knowing looks to be exchanged
No casual brushing past
When for that exquisite moment
Hand touches hand
They must remain entrenched
Until they can once again
Embrace beneath the weeping willow tree

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Comments

pumadelta | May 28, 2009 - 04:46

really liked this one, has so much intresting compartments...if i can make a meek suggestion i thought the line. "they dipped in and out of the waters like the toes of a reluctant bather."

personally and by no means proffesional i found this abit clumsy as aposed to the rest of the peice...i felt it would have sounded better, "they dipped in and out of the water like the toes of reluctant bathers'" felt if flowed better with the rest of the piece and also added credence to the plural use of they....

otherwise cant fault it...i wish i had written it...lol

Biggus | May 28, 2009 - 07:48

Thank you I'm glad you liked it.