SHE WAS ALL TITS AND DIMPLES


from the ABC set LUSTY AND EROTIC TALES

All tits and dimples in a Short skirt
Braless and bubbly and ready to flirt
I first noticed her as I was playing pool
With her legs crossed to make men drool
Looks can be deceptive I would agree
But she looked like a working girl to me
Everything on display in the window
I put down the pool cue and said hello
There was no doubt at all she was “easy”
And I knew she was offering it to me
She wasn’t wearing much to undress
But I’d seen enough to want to see the rest
However would I have to pay to see?
Or would I be getting it for free

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Comments

chuck | June 11, 2008 - 13:46

Biggus neatly encapsulates the eternal male dilemma.

Doeslittle | June 11, 2008 - 20:51

Yes, but it doesn't read very well and is clumsy in places. And somehow I find it a bit offensive...I agree with a previous comment from Jennifer that I don't understand why you focus on this sort of thing when you have sometimes posted better stuff. This is just a personal opinion, others will probably fail to see what I find a little offensive and / or untidily written about it. Sorry for this comment, but it isn't that neatly done in my view and because it seems a little derogatory towards women (not for the first time) I felt I wanted to comment.

Biggus | June 12, 2008 - 09:28

If you have read much of my work you will see I am derogatory to both genders.

I was amused that you were offended but somehow you didnt know how.

Thanks for the comment anyway.

Doeslittle | June 12, 2008 - 09:36

I am glad that this 'amused' you. 'Somehow' in the sense that when something is presented with humour or tongue in cheek, it gives me the impression, in this case at least, that I shouldn't take it so seriously. However, I was still left with a bad taste in my mouth all the same. I could have explained in more detail why exactly it offended me, but I didn't and don't see the need to. I think the fact that I said it was a bit derogatory towards women, as I have felt a number of your pieces are, is sufficient.

JoeAnne | August 21, 2008 - 19:18

You`ll get in a mesothelioma asbestos lawsuit in this way mister!! With these obscene thoughts of yours!:)