"Here comes the Sun" Said the Ash to the Oak
a mournful breeze blew, their leaves unfurling
"What shall there be, when the world is awake?"
"Whoooosh the Devil has been playing a joke,
People are lying their bodies curling"
sighed the breeze, " There is no mistake."
Out in the brilliance of the morning Sun
lie broken bodies with dust motes whirling.
Ash to the Oak with a shimmering shake
Says, "No, it's not just the Devil having fun,
Men take...
Comments
FTSE100 | February 4, 2009 - 17:46
Would you care to put an </em> after your teaser? Many thanks.
Bradene | February 4, 2009 - 17:48
Sorry! I put it right before you asked (-;
FTSE100 | February 4, 2009 - 17:53
Cool! (That's the first time I've ever said that. I wonder if it suits me?) Nice poem btw.
Bradene | February 4, 2009 - 18:22
Thanks (-; I'm a cartoon freak so I like 'Tender' TJ from Recess. I never grew up, just old! Val x
MistakenMagic | February 4, 2009 - 18:35
'Out in the brilliance of the morning Sun
lie broken bodies with dust motes whirling.'
This line is so haunting Val! So what exactly is a curtal sonnet?
Magic xxx
Bradene | February 5, 2009 - 10:27
Here is a link to the explanation, mind you I'm thick and didn't understand half of it!Thanks though I'm glad you liked it. Val
http://www.answers.com/topic/curtal-sonnet
jennifer | February 5, 2009 - 12:29
Well done, looks very difficult, I love the 'said the' part
J x