The last time she went to see him
he had taken off his trousers.
Mortified, she hid her wrinkled face
deep in her trembling hands. Pulling
herself together, she hurried
to hide his naked loins with the
tail of his shirt but failed and looked
about her for his trousers, she
found them stuffed inside his rubbish
bag, his underpants were there too
along with banana skins and sweet
wrappers. She retrieved them quickly.
With a sharp intake of her breath
she saw he had the beginnings
of an erection and slobber
dribbled out from his toothless mouth
down onto his stubble covered
chin. Where were his carers? Were they
out for a smoke? Gone for their lunch?
Why was no one attending him?
As she wondered, the contents of
his bladder was broadcast all down
her dress, and his erection was
gone in heartbeat, her heart broke as
she looked at his face, it was blank.
The light switched off behind his grey
eyes. He had gone for good this time,
not the farewell she had prayed for.
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VMM2008

Comments
Ewan | October 27, 2008 - 10:26
Gosh! Powerful stuff. I think it would be the more so without the overtness of the rhetorical (?) questions in stanza five: although I appreciate this would mean quite extensive reshaping of your piece. I particularly liked the last two stanzas. Contents,bladder etc was a very effective image.
Regards
Ewan
underthetable | October 27, 2008 - 11:01
A real powerful punch - especially the ending. Well done!
Silver Spun Sand | October 28, 2008 - 11:36
An extremely touching write, Val, that unfortunately I could more than relate to.
Tina xx
Bradene | October 30, 2008 - 19:36
Thanks Ewan, underthetable and Tina, Not an easy subject to tackle but one I felt compelled to try. it was so close to home. Val x