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Googling Earth

Posted by Bradene on May 24, 2009 - 09:12
from the ABC set Life's Ups And Downs

I happened to Google Earth;
out of the blue
for some vague reason
I wondered
if the park bench was still there.

You know what, it was

The spot where you suggested…

and I said yes.

I was wearing that dress,
you know, the red one.
I blame that red dress
for the mess I’ve made of my life.

If it hadn’t have been for that
damn rag!

You wouldn’t have…

and I wouldn’t…

How I hate that ruddy dress!

And that tune!
Lady in Red!
You’d croon, every chance you got
and we’d dance.

How I hate that damn silly song!

And Spring bank holiday
It reminds me of a park bench,
a red dress, dark brown eyes,
fly away raven hair
and a green girl who said yes.

How I hate Spring Bank Holiday!

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Comments

threeleafshamrock | May 24, 2009 - 09:31

Brilliant! I love this type of piece, that actually tells a mini story - This is what poetry should be about. The unfinished lines are inspirational and yet in no way ambiguous. Very, VERY enjoyable; wish you had it up before I threw away my Fivers on my efforts. ;) Good luck on this excellent entry.

Chris XX

Bradene | May 24, 2009 - 09:51

Thanks Chris I almost threw this away, but thought "oh what the hell I can only lose a fiver!!" Well it's more satisfying than sending it up in smoke I reckon. (; Val x

jennifer | May 27, 2009 - 23:36

Great story=poem, particularly loved the opening two lines, which are completely superb:

'I happened to Google Earth;
out of the blue'

J x

Ewan | June 26, 2009 - 10:06

Congratulations!

Ewan.

Bradene | June 26, 2009 - 10:10

Thank you Ewan. (-;

jennifer | June 26, 2009 - 10:59

Congratulations on winning with this superb poem! I am grinning away and I am sure you are still too!

J x

Bradene | June 26, 2009 - 11:05

You bet I am, thanks Jennifer. Can't wait to hear the recordings. Val x

threeleafshamrock | June 26, 2009 - 11:19

Congratulations Val, well deserved. It was my favourite as soon as I read it (and I'm not just saying that), I didn't bother saying it anywhere else because I felt it somehow unfair to others. Have read it several times since you first put it up and it didn't lose anything in the repeats; keep smiling couldn't be happier for you ;)

Chris XX

Bradene | June 26, 2009 - 11:24

How Kind you are Chris, thanks so much for that, I really appreciate your comments and well done to you too, they were a great lot of entries all round. Love Val.

sarah wilson | June 26, 2009 - 11:51

There were lots of good entries but this stood out for me too. Well done and congratulations:) sarah x

whiskey | June 26, 2009 - 11:52

A thoroughly enjoyable piece. Congratulations!:-)

Bradene | June 26, 2009 - 12:57

Thanks Sarah, I was delighted with the win. I think all the entries were wonderful Val x

Bradene | June 26, 2009 - 12:58

Thank you Whiskey for your kind remarks. Val

Cavalcaderl | June 26, 2009 - 20:50

Hi! Bradene congratulations on winning Poem"Googling Earth." there is a google satellite car now dogy at times see all. My belated Mum loved red top you toe and Lady In Red song. We hated her in Red. Reds all the Rage! now. julie

MistakenMagic | June 27, 2009 - 10:11

Congratulations on a winning poem Val!

Magic xxx

Bradene | June 27, 2009 - 10:13

Thanks Julie you good wishes are appreciated. Val x

Bradene | June 27, 2009 - 10:16

Thanks Magic for your kind words, I think everyone who entered should be proud and congratulated. It was certainly a wonderful moment for me when I realised I had won. Thanks again Valx

Richard L. Prov... | July 8, 2009 - 13:24

Hi Bradene, a really neat poem. Amazing how such a collection of words can come together, almost off the cuff. Some of my best poems (in my estimation) were written that way. Richard LP