She, fluttering in vulgar decadence
round the soft amber sodium street light
at once pounces upon a likely chance.
Earning enough to score later that night
perhaps a little angel dust or coke,
lessening the drudge of life's dreary fight.
Pleasuring a stranger, some pervy bloke,
to buy a piece of sweet oblivion
on which she prays to hell she may well choke.
Long ago she had crossed the Rubicon,
so for her, sadly there is no way back;
the stench of the road she'd chosen clung on.
No shining future ... should she just attack
the gift of life she was given, unasked ?
Screw it, hump it, thump it, turn it dark black?
Will death swoop down upon her soon, unmasked?
Copyright
VMM2004
Comments
Silver Spun Sand | November 11, 2008 - 11:11
Now this I really like, Val. My favourite stanza:-
"Long ago she had crossed the Rubicon,
so for her, Sadly there is no way back;
the stench of the road she'd chosen clung on."
Well done:-)
Tina xx
jennifer | November 11, 2008 - 14:08
I particularly liked the power in this line:
'to buy a piece of sweet oblivion
on which she prays to hell she may well choke.'
Superb imagery.
But why is 'Sadly' capitalised?
J x
Bradene | November 11, 2008 - 14:26
Thanks again Jennifer. I don't know why the Sadly is capitalised, I'm stupid :) I'll go and edit. Val x
Bradene | November 11, 2008 - 14:27
Tina thanks for the comments. Glad you liked it. Val x
jennifer | November 11, 2008 - 15:34
Sorry, being a pitnicking teacher, again!
I'll shut up now!
Bradene | November 11, 2008 - 16:57
Nit pick as much as you want, As long as I get it right in the end is all that matters, I'll make you my official and honorary nit picker :) Love Val x
jennifer | November 11, 2008 - 18:43
Hilarious.
Henceforth, I shall be known as 'Nitpicker Pickup' rather than 'Jennifer Pickup'!
Although I still prefer Witch Bitch - see:
http://www.abctales.com/story/jennifer/witch-bitch
one of my little rants!
J x