Night Out

A truly gruesome companion! The dewdrop would have looked better on their nose after the drink had made its way from the top of their head.

I liked the way the poem turned on a sixpence in the third stanza.

Will you still scan if you write

'A treacherously comic dewdrop'?

Very good this one

Ewan.

Thanks Ewan that's much better I think. that line has always bothered me slightly but hey! I have to tell the truth and it bloody did happen. Glad you liked the piece. Val

I agree, wholeheartedly with Ewan, Val and that line absolutely 'makes' the poem.

A shame it had to be true but all the more effective as is the thing with writing from the heart.

Tina xx

Thanks Tina, so nice to see you back again are you feeling better? Love Val x

I hope you didn't stay with them.

What made you sit there?

Powerful stuff...

I was out with my late Ex-husband it was shortly before I got up the courage to leave him after 29 years of turbulence, My two children made me seem like a coward, because it was only for them that I stayed, then it got to be a habit. Eventually one I was finally able to break. I must add though in the beginning he was great fun and rather lovely, though he always did like his own way, which he always got. Val x

PS Didn't you read A Grand Night Out? another aspect of our marriage.

excellent the sudden change of mood works so well and this is drafted so succintly, economically without any overplaying emotion that it is really powerful in evoking emotion. Margot

Thanks Margot, happy you liked it. Val

No, Bradene, I haven't read 'A Grand Night Out' yet - I wish I had the time to read every poem and story on the site but I simply don't! There is a stack of books to read at home, too... and writing to be done!

I shall look it up later!

Jen x

Thanks Jen, sorry I should know how impossible it is to read everything and in retrospect what a stupid and self centered question it must have sounded.. I'm not really like that I promise you, * Blushing* Val x