Past The Last Stitch


from the ABC set Life's Ups And Downs

She could never venture far on foot;
pain piercing her hip hot and sharp,
she wouldn’t carp, just carry on.

We sat on the park bench for a while
until the throbbing began to subside;
she couldn’t quite hide the hurt from me…

She told me a thing that day, surprised me!
Said she’d always wanted a red dress…
A blush began to caress her face;

that’s when I got the best of ideas.
I’d purchase some red jersey fabric,
a dress for her birthday, neat trick

if I managed to keep it secret.
It wouldn’t take me that long to make,
how could I go wrong to bring a smile

to that sweet face; always so serene
even when the agony became
demeaning. Her aim to suppress

her distress from those she loved best.
Just as the last stitch was in place
the red dress ready to encase

the diminutive figure;
she passed on, no more suffering.
Enough being enough for her.

She lay peaceful in her coffin;
nut brown hair tinged with grey
and red dress newly on display…

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Comments

threeleafshamrock | May 4, 2009 - 09:39

Lovely, sad - but quite lovely! Thanks for sharing.

Chris XX

Bradene | May 4, 2009 - 11:05

Thanks Chris, you may have guessed the lady in question was my mum, the facts basically true just the park bench bit was poetic licence to fit the rules of the comp' Val x

Dynamaso | May 5, 2009 - 06:26

My favourite for the competition so far. Lovely work.

Bradene | May 5, 2009 - 09:00

Thanks, you've really made my day. I do hope the judges feel the same way. (-; Val

Jasper_Milvain | May 10, 2009 - 15:34

Oh gosh. I COMPLETELY love this poem.

'Enough being enough for her'

THe existential wordplay here is brilliant. And the closing image hits those heart strings too.

Wow.
JM.

Bradene | May 10, 2009 - 16:04

Thanks for the great reaction to my poem JM Made me feel a lot better about it. I really appreciate you views. Val

jennifer | May 18, 2009 - 22:17

What a fantastic colour for a funeral. I think I would like to be in red, in the end. I always said that if I ever got married it would be in red...

Beautifully sad, a fitting tribute, as ever you write superbly,

J x

Bradene | May 21, 2009 - 16:41

Thanks Jennifer. Nice to see you around. Val x