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Third Time Lucky

Posted by Bradene on December 11, 2008 - 13:49
from the ABC set Experimental Works

Twice I looked to see you there
Twice you turned away
Third time lucky, do I care?
I should make you pay.
Though you prefer the mirrors cold stare
I should make you pay
Third time lucky? Do I care?
Twice you turned away,
Twice I looked and saw you there…

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jennifer | December 12, 2008 - 23:38

Haunting, but may I be rude and ask whether you'd been drinking?! ;P

Bradene | December 13, 2008 - 09:42

What if I were to answer no you may not be rude? (-; too late! No I had not been drinking just experimenting with an obscure poetic form I had read about. When I put it on UKA it got a Good read nib and even high praise from our Mr Mac! It's the first and last one I will ever write as I found it fiendishly hard to do. Val

jennifer | December 13, 2008 - 17:49

Sounds like a riddle from a fantasy novel - you may not have been drinking but it made me feel as if somebody had, possibly me?!

J x