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Posted by Bradene on December 13, 2008 - 10:38
from the ABC set Life's Funny Little Foibles

In time our bodies start to age, there is
No purpose to rant or rage, oh! really
Venting our spleens at all three Fates seems just
Irrational to get irate. So with
Snowy white or greying hair we become
Invisible; do be aware the young
Behaving like we don’t exist, will 'I fear'
Leave us feeling pissed old friend… The
End, the end, the end.

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jennifer | December 13, 2008 - 18:07

punctuation issues - semi-colon after invisible, comma doesn't work, and commas around 'I fear' perhaps? And perhaps give the Fates their capitalised respect?

Otherwise superb and - a GOOD acrostic, well-worked!

J x

Bradene | December 13, 2008 - 19:04

Thanks Jen, I'm so glad you are around to put me right (-; really appreciate your help. Love Val x

jennifer | December 13, 2008 - 19:07

Sorry, that sounded a bit blunt. I am not the Mistress of Subtlety, rather Mistress Blunt. Eek!

J x

Bradene | December 13, 2008 - 19:41

I think you are just right. I'd love to be one of your students (-; Val x

jennifer | December 14, 2008 - 12:29

Haha, why is that?

J x

Bradene | December 14, 2008 - 17:08

Because I think you would be fun and I bet they have a super nick name for you. (-; Val x

jennifer | December 14, 2008 - 22:35

Several. Their favourite joke is dropping a pen and asking me to pick it up.

It's like being back at school...;) funny thing is, they think they're original!

I simply must marry somebody with a funnier name than me, if I ever tie the knot!

J x

Bradene | December 16, 2008 - 00:38

I once knew a girl called Winnie Wag and then she married and her name became Winnie Pring (-; Honest. Val x