A Paradel (of how I feel this time of year)
Like trees in winter.
Like trees, in winter
With limbs stripped bare.
With limbs stripped, bare.
Like winter trees with bare
stripped limbs,
and cold despair.
And cold, despair!
Reaching out
reaching. Out!
And despair reaching out.
COLD…
For the sun.
For the sun
rays, healing.
Rays! healing
rays.
For the sun- healing rays
Comments
White Dwarf | November 27, 2010 - 12:10
Love it.. the simple changing of comma position changing the impression and focus.
Bradene | November 27, 2010 - 12:24
Thanks white Dwarf, it does look simple but when you only have a few words to play with it can have you pulling your hair out. Thanks again for reading and commenting. Val
White Dwarf | November 27, 2010 - 12:28
Oh yes.. I've done it myself. Less effectively.
The mechanics are simple, not the deed. Like clubbing a baby seal.
Bradene | November 27, 2010 - 12:50
Aww.. what an analogy! (; Val
White Dwarf | November 27, 2010 - 12:55
lol.. yes, I'm quite proud of that one.
Bradene | November 27, 2010 - 13:06
Having just read three parts of 'Life Just Got Better, I'm not surprised. (; Val
MistakenMagic | November 27, 2010 - 17:52
A wonderful play around with punctuation, Val! I feel a bit like this at the moment too - but I'm worried I might have to dig myself out to get to lectures on Monday morning at this rate lol Lots of snow in Durham!
Magic xxx
Bradene | November 27, 2010 - 18:16
Oh poor you, we've had a snowfall here in Grantham overnight but it's not too bad. Thanks for commenting Magic. I hope you make your lectures. Valx