Off I go with the babe
in her pram
the bag attached is crammed
To see the shops
and buy some chops
And many other things
I pop into a jewellers
to have a peep at rings
Behind the counter
the tall stoutly man
is writing with
a Swan fountain pen
Specs hanging
on the end of his nose
big eyes looking
as if in a doze
Staring staring
at me in a an odd way
as the ink from his pen
shot all over my face
And opologises
hands me a damp cloth
so I can wipe it all off
Do you think I would
buy anything there
not on your life
I do declare
The pram is parked
by a vegetable shop
left with the brake on
But "Petal" the babe
has in her hand
the biggest reddish apple
from the box stand
She has taken a big bite
although only a tiny mite
I don't know where to put my face
So quickly passing by
a picture in a window
has caught my eye
The colours are a delight
done by broad brush strokes
of a ship on the ocean blue
I must buy it too
Then I hurry on along the roads
forgetting the bag
of yellow bananas in my load
Over the crossing line
the wheels are going
bumpety bump
with each jolt
Alarm bells are going off
to tell one not to cross
the six five special
is due on time
But my yellow bananas
have jumped out the bag
quickly I turn back
one hand on the springy high pram
Bend down and rescue them
on the track
my heart is going fast
luckily it didn't end in fate
All I wanted was to get back home
and make my banana cake.
all comments please
don't think quite right yet.
Comments
fatboy74 | January 30, 2011 - 23:50
I like this one Julie, the only way we can get our kids around the supermarket is by giving them bread, donughts grapes etc which I suppose is technically stealing, but we always pay for it and it's better than all hell breaking loose. Thanks for the read. FB :-)
insertponceyfre... | January 31, 2011 - 06:41
I love the idea of the baby shoplifting the apple Julie! Also the near miss with the bananas - very dramatic!
there are a couple of things:
I must buy it to - too
as if in a dose - doze
so I can wipe it all of - off
hope that helps
Cavalcaderl | January 31, 2011 - 08:30
new fatboy74
Thankyou for a good comment.
It was all true unfortunately.
And once at a supermarket then the
low shelves a jar of pickles a friend
helped clear up she was elderly then.
Bit daft putting shelves so low.Some
used to jump on the teddies honestly.
Well I have juggled with this get the
phrases in.
Any help is great and made up the rest.
Have a good week-end going finish my sleep.
julie x
Cavalcaderl | January 31, 2011 - 08:42
new insertponceyfre
Hi! Thankyou so much for pointing
out the mistakes. Of which I have
now corrected from you all help
I appreciate. I had to think and
juggle with this make it read sense.
Especially broad bit. But it really
happened. I scolded our daughter off
not her name in kind of poem.I have to
think hard.I must catch up on yours.
Any help all appreciated. I am going
back for a doze.Reading your stories good.
Have a nice week-end.
julie x
celticman | January 31, 2011 - 10:45
nicely phrased: grasped my head from start to finish.
Cavalcaderl | January 31, 2011 - 11:50
new Celticman
Cor! thanks well tried late
at night Bananas true and rail.
Made up the rest.But good help
from insertponceyfre in couple
spelling mistakes. Or anyone can
help.Very naughty foreward child
then and apple was another time.
have a good week-end.So pleased
some are reading going up wow!
julie x
SundaysChild | January 31, 2011 - 18:58
Very much enjoyed!
Cavalcaderl | January 31, 2011 - 20:17
new SundaysChild
Thankyou so much all true
the apple at one time and the
bananas so fixed three phrases
in. Insertponceyfre helped on the
correctness kindly off and of and dose and doze.
I thought it quick juggled bit with it
brought in the picture into it.
thankyou for commenting on it.Like reading
yours and all other's give me inspiration and ideas
have a good week.It was our daughter not that name though. I pushed the second hand pram from one town to another I bought so proud of it then they have stopped making them now.Photo of it and make in the local paper not long ago.From years back.
julie x.
Silver Spun Sand | February 1, 2011 - 10:57
Julie - you have worked so hard on this one, and I'm sorry I haven't commented before, but have only just noticed it.
I too make banana cake, or rather, I used to, when my kids were small. Speaking of which, you mention 'springy' prams. A thing of the past, unfortunately. 'Cross' I seem to remember, was the 'Rolls Royce' of perambulators in the fifites and sixties. Nowadays, 'buggies' are far more desirable, seeing as you can fold 'em up and put 'em in a car!!
Much enjoyed your poem, Julie. Keep 'patting that butter'...You're doing fine;-)
Tina xx
Cavalcaderl | February 2, 2011 - 15:06
New Silver-Spun-Sand
That's ok not right yet.
I got to forgotten it moment think it was brush
going to put as doing so the coat realised couldn't
use word again, so made up rest fdor picture brush stroke.Then wasn't sure on word off and of.So chanced it.Well it was our daughter didn't quite have
the small prams then all true. Could have been a cross. She was lost in it 5lb 8oz.But insertponceyfre
earlier helped kindly on off and of. Glad you liked it 10 minute doodling it. Ppaer has unusal birds about one from Russia and other's different owing climate.Well yesterday got to town in new boots a treat went into material shop wey got metre is that spelt right black chinese fabric cheap little Butterflies all over shines certain way of light.Get
daughter do something with for me. And there were motives butterflies white pink sky blue silver.So had
to have four sew on skirt or top.Fab. Oh! dear we have three steps from bedroom had soft backless slippers on stuff in my arms missed top step grazed
knee and toe,clumsy clog. Do you watch t.v programme
"Gok" brill: fashion designer puts women into round
pear shape there's another one makes clothes by cutting jackets trimms with all fur cuffs jumpers jackets that gives me an ideas for motive I have.
"Jeremy Iron" on t.v new does a fund children activities to do something w.w.w. something.But got
long hair now. All must get involved says that's right.Well I have patted the stairs ok now.
That's not daughters name on poem.Enjoy always yours
way you can express yourself in many situations.
Now ther saying children not read to, and can't speak
time go to school. Thats why I think "The King's Speech" film is so wonderful. Yep I was must admit
waiting you to give your kind comments and touch it up re;this poem.For me and all.I have gone back finish duck knitting for children's fund Easter no time church up late.Have a good week.I have gone mad on butterflies after
your poem and Beeme's on butterflies, and brooches not the same many thanks reading it. Haven't made a banana cake for long time.Do you use a squirt touch of lemon.
julie xx
ScoZen | February 6, 2011 - 17:01
ScoZen
Hello Julie.
As ever I enjoy your tales and your replies.
Regards.
Cavalcaderl | February 7, 2011 - 16:45
new ScoZen
Hi! thanks for comments.
Do you really, I have a job
sometimes. Most are life or
experiences. Plenty of help from
Editor t.cook (Tony) AbcTales team
and many too say thankyou. I only tried
comp; last year fun, had some from homeless
group all of it was done by 16-80 year olds.
20 sentences put into poem or story. Staff would
send it off to The Big Issue some get paid bit.
CDs and short film done amazing and plastic oscars
given all anfd celebs: hand out, shame finished. Books done free. Amazing what one could try or join in. Then on here different as punctuation it was all typed by the staff. Hope all is going well for you.
Look foreward reading more of your's I am more of an agony aunt. Don't call myself poet. All headings on here at first I didn't know a thing. All lists of cherries Forum Track gradually learn't.
When new one's come on I am truly amazed see so good first timers, compared to mine.
Have a good week-end. Seen £The King's Speech" film
brill: daughter treated me, now going to see "The Black Swan" nice to go pictures and with her.
julie x