THE FLORAL SURPRISE (IP) True

Some fantastic imagery, but I think the poem would benefit from being shorter; cut the words down until each one is important, and your work will benefit.

J x

new Jennifer
thankyou for your kind advice.
I will do so.Yes,I kept adding to it,
terribly long,but true. I wanted it
well expressed and beauty and creation.
I will take note and keep trying.Don't know
if can do try.
julie x

new Julie says nope
tried,cut this down no avail.
Mine was trying to re-read words
new I tried.Against whar done!for
once both confused,but actually said
seems ok as it is.Both getiing confused.
But thanks.If cut down would spoil the basic
story,now?
julie x

Maybe you should change the format to prose and then the length won't matter. It certainly paints a vivid picture.

new Luly Whisper
Well quite pleased with
it and extra addition but
can't do prose or cut down yet.
Thanks I'll think? Yes meant to
fit all colours and things,Sunshine
and Showers (IP)
It's a one off,brides used to go in
the local park etc;rest is true to
It is great to have that imagination
now and reading all,going out being
observant terrific help.And AbcTalers
Editor t.Cook AbcTales help.Can't do all
punctuation though.Yep,fell over tree stumps
on way with daughter day time, see Abba,shaken.
Months ago doing one of our groups,new trolley
nothing heavy,crossed raod up ramp,outside local
school bang! never made pavement,badly lit bruised
hands,shoes came off,took weeks hands colours come
back.Must be age but lighting was bad.etc;
Not usually like that.
Hope your ok.
julie

"A lady basking in the deckchair
icecream entangled in her hair"
"octopus eight tentacles
yellow flying in the breeze"

You certainly have an incredibly vivid imagination.

Not very polite but quite accurate,

"Goldfish emerging to the top
their mouths open
in the murky green water
going blurp! blurp!
for oxygen and air"

Your writing is a lot more polished lately. Have you
been going for the Abc? I mean spelling lessons?

Cheers Julie keep it up!
Nolan

New Nolan
Thankyou kind notice
comment.Answer is no!
I have to have and make time
to type properly, and hit
right keys,make it read sense?
Block everything out here!
Sad news at moment.But it will
work out? I was top at spelling
ha!hah! no certifcates at school then.
GSE is that right.I had no imagination
at one time?But it is now as life really is.
I meant it was a kite shaped as an Octupus
and colour was yellow.Thankyou for doing the
punctuation I'm not good at all?
I have a blocked head at moment.Been see
my great friend,now out hospital,and in
wheelchair and nursing home.Sad so kind
and helpful to all.Getting on,so are we all.
Used to be in our groups.And meet up Pride
festival,and singing groups and writing etc;
Pleased to see me,did bit shopping for him.
Known him many years, and joined me in
so many things and through church etc:we went
and day centres.Homeless and all.
Daughter is calling in morning,will tell us
more,of what will be,will be? all I can say.I have
corrected punctuation,like you have done,thanks.
Wonderful that our Editor t.CookAbcTales.com are
now Picked as Top writing site AbcTales Wow.
Nolan what I like is, I see you comment from way
back on mine. Waiting to read more of yours.
What I do, is have a try,but if it is not right
and I can't get the hang of something,that is me,whatever I have to leave it.Never did comments in
my life! We saw our friend yesterday,but passed by
lovely cake shop we used to go and friends,lump in
my throat,thinking won't be there.And he knew my belated Mum then too.
julie xx

You’re doing fine Julie. I met a very old man once, he was in a wheelchair had Parkinson’s. Had been a bus conductor in the old days. I asked the Oom, “What can you teach me sir?” He answered, “We must count our blessings, every day”. You understand, it is not for nothing a man gets to grow so old.

And of course, content is more important than punctuation and spelling!
Cheers! Nolan

New Nolan
Thankyou so much for your lovely kind,words
yes you are exactly right,know one,ever really
knows what is round the corner.World is moving
so fast,with all the chnages.We don't have a car
so we both go down separately see my long standing
friend.Well wheelchairs go fast,but can't hold a pen
yet.So we have become his mind and body,get things.
He can't stand windows open,draughty naturally.Not moving makes it worse.Now wants his phone topped up,
then his head phones,not with him,so where seeing to that.So I ask scribble all down,wants hat?keep him warm.And course complain,as not mvoing about.But one
minute I am doing things,then mine takes over,so habe
list all exspenses down etc;not worried.But over half an hour bus,and 20 minute walk.I sat on our low
wall yesterday in the sun? and got the black cat sit
by me,unusual came up and bumping me,happy lays full
length on wall not wide.So mine scratched his tummy
of the cat,he loved it.Raining hard. Early delivery
of friends electric shaver came by post,mine has taken it down.I love your romance words in your poems.Some in the N/home ended up calling me nurse.
and bless you to.
julie xx

"I have a blocked head" sounds like a Charley Brown comic. Hope you're better Julie! Must be.

(By the way, Einstein believed that imagination is more important than knowledge.)

Cheers Julie keep it up!
Nolan

new Nolan
Hi! thanks for comment.
Well I have imagination now,
and knowledge much more since
being on AbcTales and also met
Editor tcook as had ordered mugs.
Great Abc.com ones. And only on here
a year, but it difinitley stretches
the mind, what mind? and new words
and ideas plus help from you all.
Stayed up till early morning see two
Moons, or Mars and full moon, could see
that but no planet Mars. But mine did see
a fox run down road, as I'd gone out to read
a poem and he met me.
The clouds black now and again as full moon
wafted over them, so wasted night.
Most of mine are true!
julie xx