Surprise.

Nice to be reading something different from you Celtic.

;)Pia

Thanks Pia. Everything I write is different! I think there may be another word for it.

I personally find this poignant and, somehow, rather arousing (sorry if that's not what you were going for celticman!) and I like it.

i think this is rather good, I particularly like

No words
estrangement
exercises

and

Heart training

That last one is such a good image. :-)

you know Celtic-it wasn't my intention to offend you. What I really meant was that in short stories the writer can often hide behind the characters whereas in a poem it is easier exposing yourself as an individual. Is this jabberwocky to you?
atb
Pia
PS I still think this poem is good
"In the red bleached dress of dreams" I especially liked

Hi Pia. I wasn't offended. Perhaps the surprising thing is I've usually got a destination in my stories when I write them. Poems are just flinging words up in the air and seeing where they fall. Sundays I don't know what they are about half the time. And I'm pleased you've all, taken time to look at my attempts. Thanks Fatboy.

'In the bleached red dress of dreams' - I love that, too :)

That opening stanza is really powerful too, celtic -
you should fling your words around more often, they fall in some pretty amazing ways if you ask me ;)

Rachel xx

Thanks Rachel. Nice words. I've been writing rubbish for a while. I'm sorry. I can't help myself and humanity will just need to suffer a little longer.

Hi celticman, this surprised me and showed another side of you. 'an empty space with no sides' stuck out for me. Well done for tackling something different.

There's so much in this, I'm happy you've tried a new avenue. The last stanza in particular:

Silences shattered
A corpse of a man
Reduced to love.

powerful stuff, I look forward to seeing more of this kind.

Thanks MV, if you're happy with anything I've written, I'm happy.