Holloway, open mic night

Home late, flatmate Rob's at large,
flipping pancakes for a Japanese girl.
'Not like you to skip your football night,'
I say. Sipping wine, they seek his room.
Ten minutes later, she's done, stalks off,
no goodbyes. Then, he's back, loose
dressing gown, gold medallion, 'Lowest
maintenance bird I've ever met,' he says.
'She just needs dinner.' Still up for action,
he suggests we attend an open mic night.
We go, watch a duet in shades, guitars,
the vocal inaudible. Next, a girl, rather
nervous, with home-made backing track.
'Let's find that special place,' she sings.
'My special place calls,' declares Rob.
'Where's the bog?' I too need a break,
skating the road, get a sense of flow.

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Comments

littleditty | November 17, 2007 - 19:48

Chant -absolutely love this - my neck of the woods too - only wondered if the comma/arrangement here:

We arrive, watch a duet in shades deliver,
over doom-laden guitars, an inaudible vocal.

was a deliberate obstruction to the 'flow' because it felt that way..and i'm not sure if that worked or not! will read again, really liked this one :) ldx

Yan2 | November 18, 2007 - 19:57

Enjoyed this, thanks ;)

In wine, poetry or virtue, as you wish, but enivrez-vous! The art is to be absolutely yourself -Charles Baudelaire.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vmhEMPN7y1I

chant | November 19, 2007 - 16:22

thanks, ld, have changed that line, hopefully reads smoother now.

chant | November 19, 2007 - 16:23

hello Yan, thanks for commenting. :-)

cc1959 | December 16, 2007 - 09:52

chrissie

really liked this. very dylanesque.

chant | January 15, 2008 - 10:30

thanks, chrissie. :-)