Water and carbon,
Hair and skin,
The chemistry set
Of magnesium strips that I light
As if by sorcery,
The fire I demonstrate for you,
Rubbing sticks, snarling flint against flint,
Side by side we will render the earth,
Till it with blood and tears of sweat,
Germinating and generating
I will reap and sow the labour of man
To testify in stone wonders
Of pyramid and statue and temple,
I will inaugurate swathing populations
Justifying and defending
The empirical nature of our being,
Though I will make myths of all this too.
I will make you a General
In my benevolent dictatorship,
I will watch you march up and down
Polished and heels of clickety-click,
Under order, to anthem
With your tin soldier army.
When you sulk I will avoid coups
By consulting bearded astrologers
And adding to your distinction;
I will make you my minister
For propaganda or put you in charge
Of secret missions,
I will give us names like robes
To dress ourselves in.
Together we will root and rifle through
The dog-eared hand-me-downs
Of my toy box,
We will lay it all out like ingredients,
We will place our questions at the altar
And receive the same answer
From the Magic-8 ball
As every other time we asked before:
All our edifices fall,
It is always the same construction,
It is always leaving and returning.

Comments
keleph | March 13, 2008 - 20:10
well done. this is a much richer tapestry of refrence, image and meaning than the first edition. a poem on such a broad subject will never be beyond tweaking, but for me this has achieved just about everything it needs to.
LawOfTheOne | March 13, 2008 - 21:05
Better than the first draft in my opinion.
I liked where you put the empirical line this time, it didn't detract from it as much as the first one, just added to it.
Sterling stuff:)!
Whiskers | March 14, 2008 - 18:57
I love "I will make myths of all this too" !