There are lulls in full nights
Overlooked by the moon
When it is a swollen opal
And the night seems deeper
Then, as if it is shrouding
Some secret of solemn kings,
A deviation from the cold steel
Of mechanic and clocks
That chime and drum up
The business of time,
And something finds its way
Through this gap or hole,
Innocence aghast retreats
To glades to escape the cloven
Fallow or the calculated.
We have visions with glass eyes
Of things that will return
As if our days will be made up
Of a succession of events
Brought about by hazy, bad penny
Dreams that weave their way
Through slumber as if they were troops
Marching out a heartbeat,
Or the psychic mutterings made
Wild eyed, the religious, prostrate,
Speak in tongues we do not understand
And this terrifies as much as any dream,
But look closer and there is no order,
Something primordial, mythological,
Like all words returning to alphabet
And chaos, something Jungian -
The shadow that pools in a glut
Of the mind and we look in
As though we were seeking
Our own reflection, only skewed,
Only seeming to lack the handprints
Of our more merciful control,
Words splay out like ink
Webs on blotting paper,
Speech dissolves back to a whisper
As the tall trees in the forest knife
The sky and clouds roll across it
As if they were on horseback,
Wind reeds its way like an incantation,
The hours held back like dogs on leashes,
We wake from these dreams,
Gasping out into the dawn, ‘What is it?’.
Though I do not believe in these things do I?
Magic or Gods or fate or the taboo of words
Or the power of dreams, no, I do not think
I can live under the sway of such things.

Comments
Ewan | June 22, 2008 - 07:33
Wow!
I am lost for words, which means, of course, that this poem really is - unspeakably good.
Ewan
Doeslittle | June 22, 2008 - 16:15
Blimey, thanks. Although it needs a bit more work if you ask me. I wrote it quickly and didn't edit any of it, just played with the lines a bit. It probably needs a bit more clarity. I think it's a bit confusing as it stands.
Ewan | June 23, 2008 - 07:50
Hmmm... it's poetry though isn't it? Who really has a clue what Eliot's on about after all?
Caldwell | June 23, 2008 - 13:23
I'm so jealous. This is it, how I would like to write. As far as I'm concerned it needs no more clarity, perhaps tweak a word or two. Glad I checked your posts today!
Doeslittle | June 23, 2008 - 13:49
Thanks! What words to tweak though is the question...not sure about cloven fallow personally.
Caldwell | June 24, 2008 - 08:40
"And the night is blacker
Then as if it is shrouding"
Shouldn't there be a comma after "Then" or else I'd remove it completely. Other than that, on re-reading it a few times I wouldn't change anything.
Doeslittle | June 24, 2008 - 23:33
You're quite right Caldwell, I wondered when I wrote it, but then couldn't decide so left it out. It's back in. Have made one or two changes. Thanks for punctuation assistance - I sometimes need it!
Dynamaso | June 26, 2008 - 06:16
This is a really powerful piece. I'm kicking myself I didn't see it sooner. I particularly like the resolve of the last stanza.
Doeslittle | July 1, 2008 - 07:55
Thanks Dynamaso, I still think it needs a bit of work, but not sure where or how just yet!