He stands on the side of the road,
near-empty flagon in one hand,
waving the other as if conducting
the flies around his face.
As we drive past,
he shouts incomprehensible sounds
through his great mat of beard.
We roundly ignore him.
The dust blows up and settles
in between everything;
even the first beer tastes of it.
Enough of them, though, will wash away
even the most stubborn of hard days.
Later, after it settles into dusk,
we straddle bar stools and wolf down
town burgers like a last meal.
Then, heavy with the burden
of future hangovers,
we look for the right place to tie one on.
There is only one pub in town.
We settle for the beer garden
where we can smoke and watch
the local bird life as they strut past,
dressed in city dresses and
trailing wafts of perfume.
A few hours later, long drive back looms
as last drinks are called.
Our designated driver is
kipping in the back of car,
so we order up as many as we can
to delay the journey back as long as it takes.
A couple of local boys provide
brief entertainment,
throwing words then chins then fists at each other.
These hardly connect before
the big bouncer pulls them apart,
shuffling them out the door good naturedly.
We laugh and pour the last
beer down our throats.
The driver, grumpy from being woken
and not being able to get pissed with the rest of us,
hurls the car out of the carpark.
The dark road out of town disappears beyond
the headlights; we all stay quiet in case
any noise disturbs the things beyond them.
After a while, the silence settles into snores.
Then, we come up over a rise, where he is
standing in the middle of the road,
clutching the now empty flagon
to his chest.
The driver swears and hits the skids,
waking us all up. As we slow down and swerve
around him, we see his eyes are shut tight,
as if he is sleeping standing up.
He doesn’t even see us.
Somewhat more sober
and definitely more sombre,
we stay awake all the way home.

Comments
SteveM | April 13, 2011 - 08:10
Hi Mark,
This piece really hits the mark (no pun intended). It's a really great opening ... 'as if conducting
the flies around his face' ... that's a brilliant observation.
This gets you drunk, and then rapidly sobers you up... another excellent piece.
Steve
p.s. Rebecca finally on ABC.
Dynamaso | April 13, 2011 - 08:19
Steve, thanks very much, mate, appreciate the comments. This came out almost fully formed.
This will probably only add the 'prose as poetry' debate but what the heck - I like the way it sits on the page.
Dynamaso | April 13, 2011 - 08:20
PS will look out for Rebecca.
fatboy74 | April 13, 2011 - 10:02
Totally immersed in this Dynamaso, really draws you in. :-)
ScoZen | April 13, 2011 - 14:20
"...He stands on the side of the road,
near-empty flagon in one hand..."
So it was you, you ******* that drove past me!
SundaysChild | April 13, 2011 - 14:51
Great stuff Dynamaso, I agree with fatboy- really draws you in!
Dynamaso | April 14, 2011 - 00:11
Fatboy, thanks for your support.
Dynamaso | April 14, 2011 - 00:12
ScoZen, I wasn't driving otherwise I would have stopped for you!
Dynamaso | April 14, 2011 - 00:13
Sundays, thanks very much to you too. Glad you liked this.
seashore | April 14, 2011 - 08:05
This is great - a `sobering' story really well told.
Dynamaso | April 14, 2011 - 13:24
Thanks Seashore, glad you think so.
insertponceyfre... | April 14, 2011 - 19:47
I really liked this dynamaso - I think it would make a good short story too
Dynamaso | April 14, 2011 - 23:51
Insert, thanks very much. As a exercise, I'm thinking of write the prose version of this piece.
maggyvaneijk | April 16, 2011 - 22:44
I agree with Fat Boy this piece really draws you in, packed with beautiful imagery!
Dynamaso | April 17, 2011 - 03:18
Maggy, thanks very much for your kind words. I'm pleased you liked this.
flash | April 20, 2011 - 13:55
i echo the view it has life as piece of longer prose. Bukowski sometimes writes like this , so was much enjoyed by me.
Alan
Dynamaso | April 21, 2011 - 01:42
Thanks Flash - to be compared to Bukowski, even slightly, is very pleasing.