Red dress, red dress,
slinky and fine;
scent of perfume;
heavenly, divine;
He’d do anything to make her recline.
With her he knows he’d be blessed;
she looks so good
in a tight red dress.
White dress, white dress,
chiffon and lace.
Not one single
hair out of place.
A wide beaming smile on her pretty face;
why would be a silly guess;
she always wanted
to wear a white dress.
House dress, house dress,
floral and worn.
On her hip
yet another new born.
She can hardly contain her scorn;
no wonder she feels depressed
as the best she has
is an old house dress.
Black dress, black dress,
sodden with tears.
Sad and alone,
its the sum of her fears.
She’d given her all for so many years;
he’d seen nothing but her best,
now he's up and left her
in this mourning black dress.
Red dress, red dress;
it still fits like a glove.
Her children won’t mind
nor will he up above.
It’s the one she wore when they fell in love.
Had ups and downs but no regrets,
now she’ll go to him
in her favourite red dress.
Comments
insertponceyfre... | June 1, 2010 - 16:08
I love the idea of the different coloured dresses Dynamaso - and the way it comes back to the red again in the end - that works very well
Silver Spun Sand | June 1, 2010 - 16:35
I too think this works, excellently. You have obviously put much thought into this, and it shows.
The sentiment behind it reminded me a little of that song 'Dreams of the everyday housewife', sung by Glen Campbell. One of my favourites more years ago now than I care to remember.
Much enjoyed.
Tina
MistakenMagic | June 1, 2010 - 17:05
I agree with insert - making the poem circular really works. Love the repetition too - gives the poem a great lyrical quality ;)
Magic xxx
Dynamaso | June 1, 2010 - 23:58
Insert... thanks very much for your comment. I'm thinking of putting some music to this one, when I get time.
Dynamaso | June 2, 2010 - 00:00
Tina, I did put a lot of thought into it, once I decided to finish it off. I'm pleased you noticed. As I said to Insert..., I'm thinking this would make a good song and am thinking about what sort of music might go with it. While I'm not a Glen Campbell fan per se, I think his kind of dreamy country would go quite well with it.
Dynamaso | June 2, 2010 - 00:01
Magic, thanks to you as well. As I've said to both the above, it may very well become a song. I'm pleased you think the repetition works. I like it too.
SteveM | June 2, 2010 - 11:33
This would definitely make a good song, it's got a realistic and yet whimsical feel about it, and the last verse says it all.
Dynamaso | June 2, 2010 - 22:10
Thanks Steve. Looks like I'm going to have to put some music to this one.