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In the Heat of the Day

Posted by Ewan on July 14, 2009 - 13:33
from the ABC set

I'd write, but my synapses
are treacle slow in the heat.
My brain stirs, relapses
into torpor; the slow beat
of the fakir's pulse oozing
through swollen veins,
large not just from boozing
but other heat-alleviated pains.
Maybe a rope-trick escape
from this writer's bed of nails
will come - if I truly scrape
the barrel and describe what ails
me most, besides the lack of inspiration
that brings about this verse of desperation.

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Comments

insertponceyfre... | July 14, 2009 - 14:52

air conditioning? : )

chuck | July 14, 2009 - 14:57

Punkah wallah?

Ewan | July 14, 2009 - 15:03

Don't have either!!!

insertponceyfre... | July 14, 2009 - 15:53

chuck you are showing your age!

artisus | July 14, 2009 - 17:57

Very good and so honest.

Sikander | July 14, 2009 - 19:23

Gorgeous word selection, making for a truly textural poem.
Lovely work.

sarah wilson | July 14, 2009 - 20:35

I do agree with Sikander - and I love the structure of this poem. sarah

chuck | July 14, 2009 - 22:24

Times have obviously changed for Britons abroad IPNH. In my day we'd send coolie chaps into the mountains for ice. Even had dancing girls with fans.

insertponceyfre... | July 15, 2009 - 12:19

you're making me laugh chuck - coolie chaps and dancing girls, my arse

whiskey | July 15, 2009 - 13:41

Looks like you've cured your block, Ewan - it's great! :-)

Lennie | July 17, 2009 - 08:27

Good Work!, first time ive commented on your work, but I have read some other pieces of yours and thought they where really good also.

Lennie

threeleafshamrock | July 18, 2009 - 10:41

Nice one Ewan; I feel the same except it's bloody freezing here.

Chris