There's a moment when
tears sheen the eyes
but retreat and then
business-like politeness
descends, a carapace.
There's a moment when
I could say the
'right-est' thing, but then
- far too soon - it passes
visibly, in your face.
There's a moment when
the eyes are the
words: but, until then,
slippery lines like these
must coyly take their place.
Comments
whiskey | June 30, 2009 - 11:56
A clever, thought-provoking piece that resonates strongly. Excellent!
sarah wilson | June 30, 2009 - 20:07
I think this is beautiful, particularly the last two lines:) sarah x
girlbear | July 1, 2009 - 09:50
'There's a moment when the eyes are the words'
You say it simply, truly and perfectly so.
Nathan Bednarek | July 1, 2009 - 16:16
Now this is a lovely little poem, Ewan, I really enjoyed reading it. The shortness and paunchiness of each, word, line and stanza is just perfect for this poem. Well done!
BTW- how did you manage to put the word 'are' in italics on this website?
Nathan.
Ewan | July 1, 2009 - 17:45
You need to put em in these brackets <>before the word and /em in the same brackets <> after it.
DraxB | July 1, 2009 - 17:54
greatt little poem indeed
Nathan Bednarek | July 1, 2009 - 19:58
I see... what about spaces? E.g.
I was here
....then I was there.
(the dots representing the blank space)
Do you know how to do that?
Ewan | July 2, 2009 - 06:15
Nope... have to ask someone with drupal(?) experience.
niki72 | July 2, 2009 - 09:05
Had to look up 'carapace'. A sad and beautiful poem.
jennifer | July 2, 2009 - 12:00
'There's a moment when
the eyes <>are the
words: '
Fantastic!
J x
jennifer | July 2, 2009 - 12:01
I can't do it!
Should it look like this:
< > are < / e m > without spaces?
Ewan | July 2, 2009 - 18:37
no spaces, Jen.
jennifer | July 2, 2009 - 19:28
<>are
moment of truth....
jennifer | July 2, 2009 - 19:28
Still can't do it!
Ewan | July 3, 2009 - 06:39
are
threeleafshamrock | July 3, 2009 - 16:54
<>very good
Chris ;)
threeleafshamrock | July 3, 2009 - 16:55
bugger! I can't do it either.