Sand and Glasses


from the ABC set The Long and the Short of It...

Glass. One or two, a pair, a pane. A mirror’s made of glass. It fascinated him. Glass: how could you make it from sand? Sand, it’s just silica, after all. All this because of something made of sand. A lazy laugh leaked from his lips: it had started with a glass, in a bar surrounded by sand.

‘Hi,’ she’d said. ‘I’m Mandy.’

He’d have made a joke about an old song but she wouldn’t have been born. So:

‘Hi, Mandy. I’m John.’ He tried a smile. Got an almost-smile back.

She was holding out a glass, they were sitting in a chiringuito on the beach in Banus. It was off season, wind blowing through the building. The roof looked like raffia, the bar didn’t open if it rained.

‘What is it?’ John asked.

‘I don’t know,’ she replied. ‘You haven’t bought it yet.’

He came back with two sticky glasses missing the parasols, which disappeared out of season, like the tourists.

She took a greedy slurp, licked some of the sticky fluid from her lips :

‘Mmm. I like it, Caipirinha. Not vodka though, is it?’

‘No, um, cachaça. Roberto smuggles it in when he comes back from Bahia.’

‘Not Spanish then?’ she asked, dipping a finger in the drink and sucking the fluid greedily.

‘No,’ he took a sip, held back a grimace at the yet-to-be-acquired taste. ‘Who is?’

She laughed. He thought it sounded like bubbling water in a spring.

Mandy looked at him, her irises so brown they melted into the pupils.

‘And you, what are you?’

‘I’m here.’

The spring bubbled again:

‘I like that.’ The dark eyes fixed him again: ‘so am I.’

He waved a hand at Roberto, who was cajoling the other customer into buying one for the road, or at least the pavement. Two more drinks appeared on the barrel head. She moved her long-legged stool closer, laid a hand on his forearm:

‘What do you do?’ she put her head on one side, waiting for an answer.

‘This,’ he replied. ‘I do this.’

‘What? Sit in beach-front bars?’ She took her hand away from his arm.

‘Just this one.’ He took a drink, a real one this time.

‘What’s so special about this one?’

‘I own it.’

Mandy’s hand came back. He was expecting it on his thigh. But she was better than that. She laid her hand over his.

‘Just this one?’ She had that almost smile again.

‘Nowadays.’

‘Why?’

‘The less you have, the less you need.’

Her face hardened, ‘never been poor have you?’

‘Not yet.’

She laughed, ‘I can fix that.’

And he laughed too.

So he laughed now at the memory of it and rolled closer to the wooden wall of the beach-hut bar he used to own.

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Comments

rockatansky | May 1, 2008 - 21:29

I like this story very much, it has a wonderful lilt. You managed to explain your protagonist with almost rhythm and consistency alone. If I must, I would say Roberto was unfairly left out, but that is probably what the other characters would have done.

animan | May 2, 2008 - 07:23

Yes, this was enjoyable and interesting to read. Very stylish delivery and clever ending linking back to the beginning. Skilled. Fiddling point but do lazy laughs escape from one's lips? Maybe, so.

Ewan | May 2, 2008 - 07:26

I've changed it to trickled, but I don't like it much.

animan | May 2, 2008 - 07:38

Not sure. How about 'issued' or maybe just go back to 'escaped'? I'm hopeless at this kind of stuff - pls. ignore me!

Ewan | May 2, 2008 - 07:54

Leaked!

animan | May 2, 2008 - 09:33

Not sure 'cos then one gets 'A lazy laugh leaked from his lips' which could perhaps be overdoing it a bit on the alliteration. (Oh lord, I can feel myself slipping into heavy disquisitive mode, but once it starts there's not much I can do about it!) Heavy alliteration can start to imply onomatopoeia and I don't feel that laughter is particularly an 'l' sort of a thing - to me it feels more of an 'h' and a 'r' and a 'f' kind of a thing. Also, I worry a bit about the idea that laughter can be lazy - to me it always seems quite an energetic act - but maybe that says more about me than anything!? So, how about something along the lines of: 'A rueful laugh limped from/ faltered on/ lingered on his lips'. Just a thought to keep the matter trickling along!

Ewan | May 2, 2008 - 10:48

You're right it's supposed to say something about him... none of your suggestions do it for me though, sorry! :-)

Rusty N | May 2, 2008 - 11:00

Hi,
I loved the ending. I could feel the sun (now, I don't know why I thought it was sunny), sand and the stickiness of the wind too.

(I just discovered abctales accidently and have been enjoying all these tales and inserting my own - an over eager puppy.)

Rusty N

sunshine | May 3, 2008 - 18:19

Good story which I enjoyed. As to the laughter, how about 'slipped'? Margot

flash | May 4, 2008 - 09:20

Stylish vignette , both in setting and the way it's written.