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Veil of Tears

Posted by girlbear on July 29, 2009 - 10:49
from the ABC set Poems

All these tears,
Still they come,
All these tears,
Every one...
Lost in the horizon
Like the golden setting sun.
Beneath a veil of darkness
TIll the tears they are none.

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Beeme | July 29, 2009 - 14:05

I like the repetition of 'all these tears'. A very emotive piece and great imagery 'like the golden setting sun' Well done :)

Beeme xx

kuno-chan | August 1, 2010 - 05:59

I love it!
I would just add one think though. To make it flow better I would put a comma in the last phrase. like this:
TIll the tears, they are none.

But that is just me.
I really enjoyed the poem though.

----Kuno-Chan----

girlbear | August 1, 2010 - 17:46

Thank you, that is very helpful :)

Aenigmakil | November 19, 2011 - 18:55

Beautiful. Reminds me of early Anathema (band).