And you hesitate after saying hello, then ask
and she replies she’s fine, which is a lie.
There is something awful wrong with her.
And she hesitates then asks you
And you lie too Lady Macbeth.
Now you can both complain
about your husbands. You speak of the rain
gathered like a mob lashing the windows
it’s as if it’s punishing us, she says.
You glance at the windows.
The woods seem to shift forward.
Comments
Yazmin | April 3, 2009 - 16:24
You need to write awfully wrong in the third line
but its good otherwise
well done
chuck | April 3, 2009 - 20:05
Nicely done HaiAnh. The approach of Birnam Wood is still one of the spookiest images in literature.
brighteyes | April 14, 2009 - 17:05
I'm fine with 'awful wrong' - more informal. Really nice ending - I'd remove Lady Macbeth's name and let the inference of the moving woods speak for itself - keeps the mystery!
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