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Posted by hejira j on March 3, 2008 - 20:44
from the ABC set lines and lines and lines

I can't help it -
Monday has pissed in my tea
All my karmic knots
Are wriggling loose
And this sense
Of inevitable aging
That just won't stop.
A line graph
With time on the y,
Desire to move on the x
And I am inverse,
Inside out, duvet creased
At 5pm, beads bruised
Into my neck -
A sleep slut,
I am cheating on daylight
To teach it a lesson.

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Comments

HaiAnh | March 3, 2008 - 23:16

You manage to get such force into so few words. Quite remarkable. I have cheated on the daylight so many times that it dumped me for a few months when I was in my first year at Uni.

hejira j | March 4, 2008 - 10:07

Thanks HaiAnh! I am trying to keep the daylight sweet today...

Ken Simm | March 4, 2008 - 16:28

Cheating on daylight indeed.What a wonderful concept.

spack | March 4, 2008 - 17:49

Very nice, Hedgera!

Alaw | March 4, 2008 - 21:43

I really like the rhythm and sound you have created. This works really well to communicate a sense of annoyance at these things we just can't stop.

LawOfTheOne | March 11, 2008 - 16:52

So many brilliant "bits" in such a short poem.
Loved the line graph, sleep slut and Monday pissing in your tea.
Fine poetry.

span | June 6, 2008 - 13:09

I love this.

Sleep slut x

Aloe | June 21, 2008 - 12:31

I like this very much
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