All the tomorrows ( revised)

Pia, there is certainly more 'meat on the bones' now.

The poem is infinitely 'stronger' and works excellently overall, but the third stanza is particularly rich in imagery, and the last, poignant and engaging.

Tina;-)

Hi Pia,

I love the fact that you've combined nature and
feelings, to me it brings this descriptive
poem together.

A very enjoyable read.

Jenny.

Wow thanks Tina- I really appreciate your wonderful comment. Thanks for reading. I am glad i could put a bit more meat on this one. The first draft was a bit too easy...

;)Pia

Thank you very much Jenny for that generous comment. I do love trying to mix feelings and nature. I think they are inseparable entities.

;)Pia

I just popped back to say I think you are spot on with your anology of emotion and nature. Couldn't agree more, and this poem of yours is an excellent example. Tina;-)

Thank you for coming back to me Tina- I guess I am one of those nature children- ha ha like so many others by the way..

;)Pia

I am not sure what it's about but I like the guessing and completely agree with Tina in terms of what you have added. Some excellent wordplay also. Really enjoyed this Pia. :-)

I guess I like hiding the real meaning fB but I am glad it made you think- that is what I personally like the best about poetry- having to think. Glad you enjoyed and thank you for telling me.

;)Pia

Thanks for the cherry.;)

That's a good one.

Wow, what a masterpiece. It's enigmatic and really lures you in with all those wonderful images. Impressive Pia!

Thanks Fromagreenhill-glad you enjoyed...always appreciate your comments.

;)Pia

Thanks Maggy- it's worth a lot coming from you, maestro herself...

;)Pia

"Satisfied with the wind
wrapped around metaphors.
Honesty, crystal clear not withstanding
time and your cowardice.
Codes of red-brown
on the rusty surface,
your Braille."

- love this stanza, Pia! You've used some really outstanding images here. Well done!

Magic xxx

Thanks Magic- I just needed to expand it a bit from the original one and it was fun to do. I know it doesn't make much sense to "outsiders" but it does to me. I know exactly what I was trying to convey.But that is the way of us poets isn't it?

Thanks once again for reading and your kind comment. Much appreciated and glad you enjoyed- phew! the standard tirade but it is a good one methinks.
have a lovely weekend! You must be on your way back to Uni now! Good luck!

;)Pia

Highhat

Have you ever read Louise Gluck's " The Wild Iris " ?

This so makes me think of it, with its underlying voices, and its metaphorical conversation.

Good stuff. Much enjoyed Dear :)

No can't say that I have Maggie- must look her up.
Glad you enjoyed

;)Pia

Like Fatboy, I am not sure what it's about, but i love enigmatic poems. Plus it does make you want to read it again and again. The imagery is sheer class. Really very special. Much deserved cherry Pia.

Well I do like to complicate things don't I? I'll just have to have you guessing!
Thanks OTT- much appreciated.

;)Pia

This is very good, Highhat. I enjoyed reading the very creative thoughts. Richard LP

Glad you enjoyed Richard. Thank you for telling me.

;)Pia

Stunning, Pia - 'Petals perspiring in the scorching rays of desire' & 'Silky, satin-like confidence' are two images I will never forget and make the final stanza almost jump off the screen. So beautifully woven, all of it, and an absolute pleasure to read, though like everyone else I'm gonna have to read it again and again, not only to digest everything but to fully appreciate just what you've done with this. A gem of a poem :)

Rachel xx

Gee thanks a lot Rachel- your words have really made my lovely warm Indian Summer day even better. Glad you picked out those images- I rather like them myself.
I will give you a bit of a clue: it's really about some psychological patterns that may be a bit clumsy to cope with. It's really about myself and what goes on inside my mind. But aren't most poems about that? Ha ha

;)Pia

I liked it too but I won't say I understood it. I don't think I have a poetic bone in my body so I should not be surprised that I don't understand it but I would like to...

The opening stanza was for me the most accessible.

Hi Denzella- it is strange the way we chose to express ourselves. I am most flattered that you stopped by and gave this one a go though you aren't much into poetry-makes me appreciate your visit even more.

;)Pia

No, Pia, you have me wrong. I love poetry but I am not good at writing it. Nevertheless, I strive.

No, I thought the poem was beautiful and I want to understand it. It just doesn't seem to come naturally to me. Usually, it takes me several readings before I get some inkling of the meaning. It's unravelling the layers of meaning that I need time to work on.

I shall continue to read and I'm sure enjoy your poetry.

Moya

Hi Moya- I don't always understand the layers in others poems either but I am usually captured by images. I find it almost impossible writing prose as my writing is often much too abstract and ..well poetic.

;)Pia