Ghetto view [I.P]

Over clouded pale grey sky
Yellow brick tenements
Steel plate encased gardens
Dilapidated Wendy house
Petanque course
Rosehip bushes
The cowboy angel
Rides a moped
Down the cobbled path
Old man with a walking stick
Mother in a headscarf
Pushing baby in pram
Curtained windows
Scaffolding and glass balconies
Gulls on the corrugated iron roof
Magpies perched on the aerial
Blackbirds singing
A stray cat
Dog on the terrace
hobo pushing a cart
Filled with anything under the sun
Junk mail spread around the grounds
Broken pieces of bitumen
In the old playground
Young blokes hanging out
Immigrants
Cooking smells
Washing hanging to dry
Days pass
Dusk comes
Then the night
Pitch black
Dawn breaks
With its candle lit into the sun

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Comments

seashore | February 15, 2011 - 10:17

I like this very much Pia - especially the last two lines. I could see it all. x

Highhat | February 15, 2011 - 10:59

Thank you for reading Seashore- glad you enjoyed.
;)Pia

fatboy74 | February 15, 2011 - 11:58

I've read this a few times Pia and it gets a bit mesmerizing. Really like this format of disparate images making up the whole. Well done :-)

Silver Spun Sand | February 15, 2011 - 13:09

I agree with all that has been said, Pia. Very much enjoyed;-)

Tina

Highhat | February 15, 2011 - 13:22

Thanks Fatboy. I just couldn't find out how to fill it up and thought the images stood alone. Thanks for reading and your kind comment
;)Pia

Highhat | February 15, 2011 - 13:23

Tina- I really do appreciate having you around. Thanks a lot for reading and commenting
have a beautiful Tuesday afternoon
;)Pia

celticman | February 15, 2011 - 17:48

It's got a certain rhythm to it.

Highhat | February 15, 2011 - 19:41

Yeah celticman- a ghetto rhythm- Ha thanks for reading and commenting much appreciated
;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | February 16, 2011 - 19:06

you wrote this so well Pia, I could capture the
whole essence of what you were portraying. Very
good read.

Thankyou.

Jenny.

Highhat | February 16, 2011 - 20:35

Thanks very much Jenn- I am so glad you got the picture. It's where I live and I love living here.
;)Pia

Kahdai | February 17, 2011 - 22:15

Last few lines are lovely and some other I really like for some reason,
Scaffolding and glass balconies
Gulls on the corrugated iron roof
Magpies perched on the aerial
Blackbirds singing
A stray cat
Dog on the terrace
hobo pushing a cart
Filled with anything under the sun
nice one Pia x

Highhat | February 17, 2011 - 22:19

I gave it a go Kahdai. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks a lot for taking a look and commenting. Very kind of you. Hope you are okay?
;)Pia

Kahdai | February 17, 2011 - 22:34

yeh thanks :) am still trying with old IPs

Highhat | February 17, 2011 - 22:55

That's a fine thing to do. Good idea- they can be pretty difficult at times but it is nice to have a sort of guideline. That is just what I think :)
;)Pia