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Gunned down (I.P)

Posted by Highhat on March 14, 2011 - 06:52

Murder in the streets
a 19 year old
No older than my son
a Mother’s heart is bleeding
a sister, a brother
his father.
Dispute
Gang related
gunned down
on a street
where my other son
has his beat
together with my
little grandson
This is the hard way
to resolve matters
Several shootings
recently
Why do they join gangs?
Why do they
gun each other down?
They must be
neglected by society
despite all efforts
to integrate
this young boy
was from an
immigrant family
They have their own gangs
cruise around the city with
guns and
shoot each other
This is the hard way

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Comments

skinner_jennifer | March 14, 2011 - 10:00

Hi Pia,

you have written a very honest piece here, that is
real and very scarey, yes I think it is definetly
a good one for the IP.

Jenny.

Highhat | March 14, 2011 - 13:18

thank you Jenny for popping by and commenting- I really do appreciate it
;)Pia

Sooz006 | March 14, 2011 - 18:43

Nice metre Pia. Gritty and real.

Silver Spun Sand | March 14, 2011 - 19:09

Well done on this one, Pia;-) A real 'gutsy' feel about it, and as Sooz says, the metre and the line lengths suit it well.

Tina

Highhat | March 14, 2011 - 21:01

thank you Sooz and Tina- there wasn't that much to say about the incident really- so disheartening- thank you both for reading and leaving a comment- was very kind of you
;)Pia

seashore | March 14, 2011 - 21:21

Very good piece, Pia

Highhat | March 15, 2011 - 20:55

thanks seashore
;)Pia