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'Tousled tendrils reaching into the fire
I was inhaling the smoke of delusion;
drunk and high, never feeling lonely.'

This and the last stanza, do it for me...life flashing before your eyes? Kind of creepy...but in a Good way. Makes me ask questions, that I don't really want answers to :^P I like!

Chris ;)

Thanks Chris for your kind comment and for reading..

;)Pia

Hello Pia, I do enjoy a bit of surrealism, and you achieve it in this very engaging piece. Well done!

sue

Thanks Sue

;)Pia

I think sue's description of 'surreal' suits this very well, and I too found my head filling with questions as I read it, with the first three lines saying it all, perhaps;-)

An original and thought provoking piece.

Tina;-)

Thank you Tina

;)Pia

Much enjoyed Pia, I especially liked those first three lines x

Thanks Sundays-the poem's essence is really those lines.. Thank you very much.

;)Pia

thanks for the cherry..;)

That first stanza is just stunning and sucks you right in! This is one of your best pieces, Pia. Very well done!

Magic xxx

I am so pleased you think so Magic. Thank you.

;)Pia

This is simply wonderful. A comeback only equalled by Take That. Not that you've been gone that long, but your slight absence alwys makes a dull ABC. So very glad that you got that cherry and quite right too.

OTT- wow that was really nice of you. Take That, eh? Ha ha- you are too kind. Thank you so much. Puts me in a great mood for the rest of the day...

;)Pia

This is so good, Pia - I've just tried to copy/paste my favourite bits but I seriously can't. I've also never read a poem before with the same 'tone' as this one. Years ago there used to be an alco-pop called 'Metz' - I dunno if it's still available anymore, haven't seen it in Asda for yonks. They used to put these Scandinavian-style animated adverts on the TV for them, which I loved, and for some reason this poem made me instantly think of those kooky ads. Really, really enjoyed this - would love to read more like this, it's left me feeling as if I've had a touch of deja vu, dunno why, but I don't half like it ;)

Rachel xx

I'm over the moon with your comment Rachel. It really warmed my heart and the Adverts sound really fun (?)- funny this reminded you of those. I know what you mean about the deja vu thing- I had it with another poem on here recently. It's strange that happens, isn't it?
I'm really glad you liked this. Thanks a lot for your wonderful way of telling me.It's a comment such as your that really makes me smile not that I don't like the other comments- oh you know!
atb

;)Pia

PS I wasn't drunk when I wrote it- am so dull that I am never drunk- hardly even tipsy- too old for all that jazz...

;D

Watch this and all those hazy nights will come flooding back to you, Pia!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=viicfCTN7co

Hope you don't mind the link, and thanks again for taking me down memory lane with this one ;)

Rachel xx

P.S - 'dull' is a word that doesn't sit well next to your name at all, Pia. Inspiring, quirky and loveable sit much more comfortably, if you ask me (better still, ask them, they'll tell you the same) ;)

Will stop littering your page now :)

Rachel xx

Wow what a weird ad Rachel!! thanks for the link- never heard of the stuff.
Thanks for getting back to me.. those were kind words you wrote about me. I lap them all up..
;D
Pxx

I think you are spot on with your comment about seeing clearly Richard, once we have dropped all the stimulatives. When I write from the heart it is not only about myself so thanks for noticing- though I don't always think I have it in common with others having been a loner for so long and it is always a comfort to know I am not alone with my thoughts. Thanks for making me conscious of it this time, too.

;)Pia

Excellent - my favourite line is `I took an X-ray of my memory'. Fabulous. Well done Pia. x

Thank you so much Coral- really appreciate you reading and leaving such a fab comment...

;)Pia

Just came back for another read of this terrific poem. I know what you mean about being a loner. But I promise you that you aren't ever on your own here. We all think the world of you.X

That really touches me OTT- such a beautiful thing to say- thank you very much. I will reciprocate by saying that we wouldn't know what to do without you and your fabulous Abc-OCD stories and your always welcome comments.

atb

;)Pia

A dream sequence and arranged beautifully.

thank you scratch...

Hello again Pia - I never say things I don't mean. It's just the plain ole truth honey -so don' you go gettin down.

As for ABC OCD - once I get off my fat bottom and write - I just consult a list of recent symptoms that I have manically scribbled down - and take it from there. For instance I have just scribbled down how annoying it is to have loads of reads and even a cherry but few comments - cowards!

Also - as I have said - it was you who inspired my latest evil scheme. At New Year I am going to try to do a spoof ABC Tales award ceremony - and I can confidently predict the outcome of one category at least. (Three if you count all Olpesky's awards - though he doesn't know it yet). What do you think? Should I get it patented. Now look at me - selfishly taking up space under your fine, fine work to go an about myself. Shame on me!

Sounds like a lot of hard work OTT- are you up to it? Then I'd say Go Go Go! I think we need a category for least understandable poem? An award please- I think we could have a few runners-up Me, Fatboy, Animan and who else?Patent- well I think it must be copyright you are talking about? I would very much like to have an award I can put on the mantlepiece or on top of my bookcase- (I don't have a mantlepiece)- it would have to be in Bronze- maybe the infamous Cherries. But if you are only going to write about these awards , well I think that would be good also. Maybe you can get Footsie to make a fine banner with small twinkling cherries covered in glimmery stardust and blinking on and off. Is that a bad idea?
I will be the first to recommend you for a cherry. You see if you do it along the OCD lines it will be perfect.
I like this personal touch of yours. A good adition to ABC- and if it gives a laugh, which I am sure it will, then that is a huge benefit. Go for it Gal...lassie..sweetie...

Sorry I've come to this one so late Pia.

I felt it had a dream like quality to it, the way
you described the jester with his pointed hat and
the bells ringing, as he disappeared down the path
on cobweb thin legs, it felt like something out of
Hans Christian Anderson. Yes very dreamy.

I think that when you come out with a poem, it
always jumps off the page and makes you want to read,
this one certainly did.

Hope you are well and having a good weekend.

Jenny.

That's okay Jenn- thanks a lot for reading at all- much appreciate your kind comment. Glad you enjoy reading my stuff. I like that " jumps off the page" !! ;D

;)Pia

I'm not surprised you have had so many comments on this and a thousand apologies for not noticing it before. Difficult to add anything meaningful save to say I enjoyed it immensely Pia. :-)

It's almost impossible to keep up with everything so Please don't apologize FB. Glad you enjoyed.

;)Pia

This was very neat.....Norm

Glad you liked it Norm. Thanks for telling me.

;)Pia

'I took an x-ray of my memory,
was astounded to see
mathematical formulas alongside my Mum
and a book- open, yet almost closed,
years ago.'

I love the sense of the whole poem, but these are stand-out lines for me. Striking images. Well done.

Thanks a lot for reading and leaving a comment Stan...
really appreciate you reading my poem here..

;)Pia

"...jangling along on cobweb thin legs..." I love this line the imagery is like a photo in my mind...brilliant... :-))

regards
Terry

Thanks Terry.I rather like that image as well..

;)Pia