Smooth marble cut,
Dirty slut.
Prancing around the tables,
Preaching her fables
From the Bible of the night,
And with all her might,
She whispers in your ear,
"You! Come 'ere".
Come with me,
And you'll see,
A world of pure imagination,
To quench insatiable fascination
For all things strange,
twisted and deranged.
Positions that should be banned,
Youre body stretched, poked, scanned
By curious eyes,
But I think it wise,
That youre wife never know,
About where you go,
In the midnight hour,
Before you return home to cower
In her loving arms,
And using all your charms,
You make her weak at the knees,
So easy to please.
And as you slur into sleep,
Ready to creep,
Back into the dark,
Leaving no trail or mark
As to where you go,
Move slow baby, move slow.

Comments
jennifer | March 1, 2010 - 19:29
'insaciable' should be 'insatiable' and 'your' is the possessive (you're, with the apostrophe, is a contraction of 'you are' - you can tell it's not that one you need if you say 'you are' in the sentence and it doesn't make sense). You also need to rethink your punctuation - in poetry it should be used in the same grammatically correct way that it is in prose - i.e. no full stops mid-sentence - try re-reading your poem and you will see what I mean).
Other than that, some great imagery and rhymes going on here,
J x
InspiredWriter | March 2, 2010 - 18:36
Thankyou, and yeah i see what you mean =)
XInspiredWriter
penandpaperdreams | April 2, 2010 - 17:31
I agree, great imagery and lovely rhyming. Liked this a lot :)
Rachel xx