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Posted by jacques07 on September 19, 2009 - 05:42
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The Beach.

The red sun rose over the ocean.

He found her on the sandy beach underneath the palm trees. They embraced and kissed. They kissed again. The red sun sank into the sea.

They lived happily thereafter.

The End.

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Comments

Mangone | September 21, 2009 - 18:46

The sun rose red over the sea.
I was in the pink.
I thought the palm was green with envy.
But the sea was blue and so were you.
So I turned purple.
You turned away.
The sun sank yellow.

jacques07 | September 24, 2009 - 05:34

Nice metaphorical speech. Mine is more romantic.

Mangone | October 12, 2009 - 13:42

Yes, yours is much more romantic but mine is more colourful :O)

jacques07 | October 25, 2009 - 17:45

Yours is also more funny. It is nice.

cheers.