Delirious (21st July, 2010)
Slick, your dampened skin;
The taste of salt, of sweat;
I’ve made you want to forget
Her face; her curve; her breath… yes.
Taut, my body poised,
A welcome note to sin;
Uncurl and then re-begin:
I’m caught; I’m wet; I’m near… yes.
Fast, like cannon fire,
Slow as a laboured drum,
This is how things are done:
We rise; we fall; we tire… yes.
Halt, you see the sun?
The night has ebbed and flowed:
Not broken, and yet bowed,
You smile; I laugh; exalt… yes,
Lay, delirious
Here in your twisted sheets;
Shall I admit defeat?
I’m here; she’s not; you want… her.
Rise, I find my head,
Reluctant nakedness;
Light hurts, yes, I will confess:
I burn, I yearn; I’m spurned… I dress.
Comments
simonbarget (not verified) | July 22, 2010 - 10:34
I like: 'we rise we fall we tire' the best.
I think taught should be taut? and canon or cannon?
jennifer | July 22, 2010 - 15:20
Yes, I did mean 'taut'. This is what happens when you teach spelling and the 'canon' of English Lit all day and try to write poetry late at night...
Ha! Thanks for spotting those!
J x
h jenkins | July 22, 2010 - 17:01
I like the staccato feel to this and especially like the last line.
Really good and ... alas, all too familiar a scenario.
Helvigo Jenkins
Cavalcaderl | July 22, 2010 - 17:08
new Jennifer
well deserved cherry!
Liked romance,and flow of
the rhyming.Certainly delirious.
julie xx
Caldwell | July 25, 2010 - 12:22
WOW! That's powerful.
In sin no one wins.
Though I think you'd come
Out on top to be fair
With your emotions laid bare
And frankness as your secret
Weapon.
A treat to read.
MistakenMagic | July 25, 2010 - 15:51
Completely agree with Helvigo: brilliant rhythm in this one, Jen! Especially loved these lines:
'Halt, you see the sun?
The night has ebbed and flowed:
Not broken, and yet bowed,
You smile; I laugh; exalt… yes,'
Haunting and beautifully gritty. Well done ;)
Magic xxx
jennifer | July 28, 2010 - 00:19
Thank you to everyone for all your lovely comments!
Very chuffed!
J x