Don’t. Stop. Me. Now. (12th Dec 2008, 11.46pm)
Don’t. Stop. Me. Now.
The poets are in flow,
Oh watch those words
Go, go, go,
Fly out like swallows from their nests;
But listen, chicks, Mother Witch knows best…
Let’s have a check of what we know;
Listen, kiddlywinks, so far so…
Semi-colons, colons, commas,
Hypens, dashes, kamikaze bombers…
Watch out! Duck! Machine gun happy;
Triggers pulled, don’t **** your nappy!
What, what?
Phut, phut?
Was that an ellipsis after that ‘but’?
Stick your oar in like a question:
Exclamations after lessons!
What’s my problem?
Look who’s guessing!
I fear a sudden epidemic,
A rash of sorts – I say!
Purely academic?
Listen, teacher,
Wipe the board:
Your philosophy is faintly flawed
And your audience is growing bored -
Time for a stanza break!
Demarcated? Nay, leave it blank,
The Reader must know
Who to thank!
Applause! A pause, simply
to appreciate the flaws…
Don’t. Stop. Me. Now.
I’m slightly sore…
Jennifer Pickup
Comments
Macjoyce | December 13, 2008 - 00:47
Ah, if only poetry was really like what you say. It can border on it when bellowed down a microphone. I recommend doing that until such a time as you get bored with it, which I now am. But this would make a good performance poem.
Mother Witch, I presume?
www.myspace.com/norwichfacetransplant
chuck | December 13, 2008 - 01:10
I don't think jennifer is after starting a major social revolution. Still you'd be amazed what a well-placed comma can achieve.
Ewan | December 13, 2008 - 09:13
But I don't... What are you on about? LOL
Very good. It shouted off the screen, and my eyes are sore. :-)
jennifer | December 13, 2008 - 09:38
Mac - so what is poetry REALLY like? Why are you trying to squeeze it into a tiny little box, when surely poetry is artistic expression, and therefore uncontainable? I will scream it from a microphone if someone will give me the opportunity...!
Chuck - 'tis just a plea for the other punctuation to get a look-in sometimes - the full stop rules too much...
Ewan - thank you, sorry about your eyes! Perhaps sly of me to post late at night so it lay in wait for you this morning!
Bradene | December 13, 2008 - 10:30
Wow! I think I felt the bullets go right between my eyes!... ? (-; Good one as per. Val x